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Her name was Alyssa, and when she was nine, her mother built her Wonderland. After being raised on a healthy diet of Charles Dickens, Enid Blyton and J.M. Barrie, it seemed like the natural course of action. She created it out of paper, each scene indispensably, indisputably perfect in its imperfection.

And she did it because Alyssa was terrified of the idea of falling through a rabbit hole, into a place that allows magic only when you are confused. Mothers do the most impractical, exhausting things to show how much they love their children. It seemed a pity that it was this very effort that kept Alyssa up all night, staring at the paper people like they were coming to get her.

(If Alyssa’s mother knew, she would have spent all her time trying to explain to the little girl that it wasn’t just paper people she should be afraid of.)

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God appeared to have a sense of humour when little Alice became Alyssa’s best friend. She lives across the street, her hair always wild when she would run over in the same little blue dress and tell Alyssa the strangest stories.

Having understood that paper people were no longer meant to be feared, Alyssa listened with wide eyes to her paper-story-loving friend, becoming a part of a landscape that housed fairies and pixies and odd little men with funny hats and talking animals. It accepted her into its folds gradually and in a tree house made by Alice’s father, they tried to understand why ravens are actually nothing like writing desks and how hares would actually hate tea, but perhaps love coffee.

(This was before Alice’s mother left and her eyes broke, and they grew to understand that people grew apart better with pain than distance.)

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James liked to drink coffee and wear funny hats and gave people rabbits as gifts. And he had never read anything about Wonderland. So of course, Alyssa had to fall in love with him. She counted the droplets of water on his eyelashes when it rained and wondered about how someone who has promised himself to her so effortlessly could possibly be seventy two point eight percent water; all this, because water was so easy to drain away.

She called him the Mad Hatter. He never quite understood the reason behind the name.

(That’s the thing with being in wonderland. It never really likes to acknowledge its own existence.)
This is a little bit of a fractured fairytale which has been with me for some time and I am finally posting it now. I'd like you to meet Alyssa...and maybe find a little bit of her in your mind.

For :iconlightoverpowers58: for standing by me in a really tough situation. Bless you my dear. :hug:

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RoseScarlet Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2013  Student Writer
that is amazing. i love this part the most: "people grew apart better with pain than distance". <3<3<3
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giggles855 Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
my name is alyssa

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NekoNekoGirl997 Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I'm dying in anticipation.
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Awstein Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2013
This is very good. Simple and clever, really works great.
Just a thought: is it my imperfect English, or have you forgotten "are" in "why ravens actually nothing like writing desks"?
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Argh! Thank you for catching that, I fixed it! :)
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Awstein Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2013
Haha you're welcome, small mistypings are bound to happen on such a long and rich piece :p I'm glad it wasn't just some vernacular syntax I missed though, I would have been very ashamed!
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MakiLotus Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh My Gosh... .__. KEEP GOING! >.<"
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!! :)
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MakiLotus Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
No problem! x3 Really want to see more of this!
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xMIxx Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Wow.. This is actually amazing..
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you, my dear! :)
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xMIxx Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Very much welcome. I love all of your work :D
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Rojozorra Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
This is ever so perfect.
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you soooo much!! :hug:
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Rojozorra Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2013  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
You are soo welcome. :smooch: <--- favorite emote on here.
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cosmosgrl19 Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
oh my Alice in Wonderland nostalgia :heart:

Beautiful way to tell the tale in a new way, sweetie!
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you, as always your comments are so lovely!
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cosmosgrl19 Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
you're welcome dear, and thank you for saying that!^///^
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DevonEaton Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is what I like to call chaos writing and it can be so fun to write, especially if you have a good theme and you most definitely have that.
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much, my dear! :heart:
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DevonEaton Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome!
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YagamiYoshi Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I like it a lot! The ending is almost ominous, makes me suspect he becomes the Mad Hatter from Batman or something. Well done!
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you, my dear. That means so much to me! LOL, I know, I can see how it could come across like that. It could be a darker twist! :)
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YagamiYoshi Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
No problem :) Exactly. One of the nice things about ambiguity is that it leaves that sort of option open.
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slycooperfan Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Student Writer
Yet another wonderful piece <3 your writing is seriously touching and magical.
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Awww, thank you, my dearest! :)
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Kiwifyed Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is fantastic :) 
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :)
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UnluckyNumberXIII Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This is amazing. I mean, I love all of your works but this one's a little closer to me because I loved books as a kid. Thanks for writing this. 
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much. :) I love reading myself and I was actually thinking of doing a series of fractured fairy tales like this. :)
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UnluckyNumberXIII Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You're welcome. That would be lovely. 
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snowywolf13 Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
This is beautiful and so poetic, extremely well-written. I love it.
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much, my dear. That means a lot to me. :heart:
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snowywolf13 Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
I'm glad :)
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JayDanjerCobain Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is just brilliant, oh my goodness
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much, my dear. That means a lot to me. :)
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LightOverpowers58 Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Student Writer
This piece is almost...whimsical in its intensity--it's tragedy and beauty and hope written in delightful increments..lovely work, hun!

And like I said, stop thanking me for stuff I'd do it regardless. :hug:
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much, my darling!!! I am so glad to see you like this...lol, and once again, I have thanked you. :P
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LightOverpowers58 Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Student Writer
see me like this?

There is no stopping you anyway, I may as stop asking you to not say thank you. No, I disagree! 
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irrenderNarr42 Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
cute.
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :)
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irrenderNarr42 Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
pleasure^^
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MetalPorSiempre Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is so coll in so many ways that I don't know how to express my enjoyment of it.
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much, my dear. :hug:
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Please-Not-Last Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Student General Artist
I love it! And I love the references to the original Alice in Wonderland. And the italicized sentences give it a different feel, like you're still there but stepping back to see something else. Great work! :aww:
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so very much, my dearest, for this kind and wonderful response. :hug:
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