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"I wish you would give it back to me."

"Why? You'll just break it again."

"It's my heart. I will do whatever the hell I want with it."

"Yeah? Well, you take terrible care of things that are yours."

"Fine. Keep it. I am equal parts concrete and soul anyway."

"You say that, but I'm not entirely sure that you are. I think you're deep, and fragile and broken, and that makes you beautiful."

"Again, concrete and soul. "

"I wish you wouldn't make this so hard."

"So hard? I'm making this easy. You gave me dreams of half feathered swans and a stupid house on an endless beach and a city made of an ocean, and now you're taking it all away. But at least I had them for a while."

"Don't…be that way."

"I am going to be awake every single night and wish for a shooting star, so I can wish upon that shooting star to wish thoughts of you away."

"I wish this could be easier on you. You gave me so much and so many too."

"So much of love and so many wishes?"

"No, so much wishing and so many loves."

"Please give it back to me."

"I have to keep a piece of you, don't you understand? I do not want to forget you."

"But it's my god damned heart."

"If you liked it so much you wouldn't have given it to me in the first place."

"Fuck you."
I seriously need start sleeping earlier. Also, I long for the day we hear about Brandon, a broken eyed boy and Ella, an ink wristed girl who happen to be nobodies, but have a love that lasts centuries.

No more tumblr or news for me until the Kristen Stewart, Robert Pattinson break up story is no longer front page news. I like my cereal paparazzi free and full of nutritious information about health, science and politics.

Seriously though, the way they are profitting off these people's misery is sick. I do not like twilight, but no one deserves someone prolonging this kind of pain longer than necessary.


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DayDreamer5656 Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Damn thats some deep shit
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MintyMintamin Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
. . .i'm far too gone to be ever full
so many people have pieces of me, and i'm nearly gone
sometimes, i wish i could just pull myself together
but i'm so scattered and so apart, that i cant ever wish for that. . .
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GOHIBI Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2012
You are a bright and shining light. If I have a piece of your heart let me know so that I may nurture it as much as possible. Then, when you need it back, it will be stronger than before. You carry a part of mine with you always.
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shehrozeameen Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
The ending was interesting - reminded me of Glass House.

Also, it reminded me of something which is actually a good point on part of one of the actors in this work: the heart; curiously, it reminded me of Hardy - a glimpse over his "Jude the Obscure" and "Return of the Native" because "Tess of d'Uberville" was just too depressing (straight out of the beginning in fact). What I love about the person is that he's constantly telling the other person exactly what anyone feels when they speak of giving a part of one's self away - I feel that way when with my parents and my family, in that yes I'm happy to be with them and I'm grateful that I'm with them, but too much love is encroaching. Its the same as with Stephen Dedalus so far in "A Portrait of the Artist as a Young Man" - its the perfect recipe to generate pessimism and (in a way) animate the polar side of one's persona.

Though on a side note, I stopped reading the news a long time ago - found it too miserable for my taste (seriously speaking, the news I have is all violence, court intrigue, and homicide).

And no I disagree - the way they are profitting off these people's misery is disgusting and wretched; but coming from a media that's willing to tap into phones of Catholic Church vicitms, and coming from a media that made the London heist of last year (with all the bombast of skinhead culture being the "UK Spring") AND the death of Princess Diana and all its rot, I digress.
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BluVenus14 Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2012  Student Digital Artist
It really is funny - our hearts are the most precious parts of us, and yet very few actually protect it very well. Not as well as we should, anyway. I, personally, am beginning to doubt the very existence of my own, my emotions are so muted at times...
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haggard85 Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2012
This did a work on me, leaving me, for a moment, lost utterly to memories that should have been left under the dust. Made it hard to write a comment on it. But that last line....it caused a part of my soul to sing again, not in hope or joy, but in profuse defiance. Damn the arrogance of one who would think they can abate the pain of a broken heart, they will find furious fire to let them know what it really feels like.
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Mrs-Freestar-Bul Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I absolutely love it. A beautiful read :salute:
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Maerd7733SCAIP Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I love how raw the emotions are in this, and how so many people can relate to it :) It's beautifully written as always :hug:

Also: celebrities are overrated. The rest of us get on with our lives just fine without crews of camera men following us around. I'd rather read about something worthwhile, like a new scientific discovery that could change our lives for the better :shrug:
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KittyOfDeadlyPoking Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2012
I really like this. Even though it's only dialogue, we get enough of the story. Very well written.
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MeitanteiChaos Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2012  Student Writer
this is amazing~~~!!!!!!
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LoliMoetan Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2012
............................ BRILLIANT!!!!!!!
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Cinders8328 Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I liked it, I don't know what else to say except that I really enjoyed it :)
:heart: Cinders
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much for reading this, my dear. :)
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Cinders8328 Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Np, that's why I watch you sweetie!
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forestmeetwildfire Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
i am so enthralled with this idea of dialogue with poetry creeping in. it's so... i don't know. i can't imagine anyone talking like that in real life but it's such a lovely thought. and this is wonderfully written. :heart:
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much for this. :hug:
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deeply-sad Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
For some reason I was moved by it, even though it also confused me slightly...but still moved by it haha
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Awww, thank you for responding. :)
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PocahontasJohn Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2012
Oh my God, I think you wrote about me
I loved it ... summarized what I feel ... thank you
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much, my dear. :hug:
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PocahontasJohn Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2012
You're welcome!! You are a great writer!!
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Premier1er-Stock Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2012  Professional General Artist
This is simply a blunt strike for defeat, but you choice of writing is clover satirist my dear.
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you, darling. :)
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2012   General Artist
Oh and congratulations on the well deserved dld!! :clap:
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much!! :D
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2012   General Artist
You are most, most welcome! :la:
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2012   General Artist
For some reason, after reading this, I keep imagining cerulean liquid in some sort of heart shaped flask. That impact with that last, "fuck you" was awesome sauce.

can't people get over it already, I mean what's so astounding about yet another holly wood fluke? sheeesh
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
That's beautifully visualised. Thank you for that. :)
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2012   General Artist
Thank you for writing this:heart:
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astrangeallure Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Probably just residual effects from my own personal experiences, but this sounds like someone talking to a psychopath/person with narcissistic personality disorder...so in that light, very well portrayed. :)
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much for saying that. It is indeed. I actually was dating someone with narcissistic personality disorder, it probably comes from that. They try and make you belong to them. :(
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astrangeallure Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Yes...and you do for a time...belong to them. It's very hard to move on...I wrote "get over" at first and had to change it...I don't know if you ever get over it? Maybe, just get through is a better way of putting it?
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xlntwtch Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2012   Writer
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This is actually cathartic and kind of fun to read, probably because of the wonderful format and because... it's cathartic. How many times have we asked for something like love back, only to be refused? The last line is the only way to end it. Thank you.
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Awww....thank you for that beautiful, insightful response. It means a lot to me. :)
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xlntwtch Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2012   Writer
You're very welcome. :)
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SixstringMatt Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2012
I hope, if I ever become famous, I do it in the best and most legendary way possible. - LOOOONG after I'm dead and gone :P That way I never have to worry about it.
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
HAhahaahahaha!! I actually know where you are coming from. Kinda like Van Gogh, huh??
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espalion Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2012
This is lovely, and brings back memories for me. I actually told my boyfriend once to give me back my heart, because he didn't know what to do with it. In different words, but same feelings, we had this conversation.
So this is ... touching. Very much so.
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I am so sorry you actually had to go through such a painful conversation. :( :hug:
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espalion Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2012
I read through a bit of you answers to other comments, and saw you said you're thinking of giving up on your puzzle piece.
So I just wanted to say, my fiancé, with whom I had this conversation, is my puzzle piece. And sometimes the puzzle piece has jagged edges.
So please wait. You'll find him. And when you do, remember that sometimes it takes pain to build a relationship, and that the pain will lead to trust, and love, if it is carefully managed.
Please don't lose hope...
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Your wonderful literary work has been chosen to be featured by =DailyLitDeviations in a news article that can be found here: [link]

Be sure to check out the other artists featured and show your support by :+fav:ing the News Article. Keep writing and keep creating.
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
WOW! Thank you so much!! :D :D :D
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sourismini Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2012
Thumbs up for this magnificent artwork ! It's been a long time...but I wish you wouldn't wait for depressing things to happen to write. Doesn't it make your like look much more sad ?
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much, my dear. I know, but powerful emotions (usually grief) is what helps me write best. :(
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sourismini Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2012
Maybe good laughs or silly events are also strong emotions or make a good inspiration source.
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AzureDemonGod Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2012
Unfortunately i know this feeling a little too well :( since i'm in more or less the same situation :-\
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I know how that feels. Rest assured, and I promise, it gets better. :hug:
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AzureDemonGod Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2012
Thanks, i guess we'll see if that true or not. :3
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gabrielIgnitus Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
If he wanted his heart back, he wouldn't be asking for it. He'd just take it, because he knows its his... Unless-
Of course, there's an "unless" Life would be dull if there weren't any "unless"s, "but"s or any kind of way to join a sentence to the other, don't you think?
Unless, he wants her to remember: good times and bad times are just a part of life. And love isn't just a game, but it's a fun one to play...
Or, he just wants to struggle for the fun of it. In that case, he probably broke up with her with mean intentions.
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