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Sweet and sensual,
The feel of your fingers on my skin.
Slow and longing,
The trail of your hands on my curves.
Languid and helpless,
The pulsing of my veins under your masterful strokes.

My love for you is like my love for apples.
Juicy, crunchy, delicious...
And as dark as a sinner's heart.
Sex is a beautiful thing. Especially when your partner treasures you. A play on original sin.
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MsPhantomessLOL Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I love this poem. It's sensual and almost dark at the same time. Keep up the good work! :iconilavitplz:
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LightOverpowers58 Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013  Student Writer
"as dark as a sinner's heart"....or as vibrant as an angel's trumpet (or perhaps an apple's golden flesh)?

Wonderful poem, m'dear...the finest of simplistic sexuality :D
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KageMoon Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Apples are my favorite. If could work and get paid in apples, instead of money, I would!!!
Sex and passion are a marriage's irresistible overthrow
Beautiful, Sensual, great job!
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SteffenC-itsjustme Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
How about them apples!
- don't know why I thought about that, I just did :P

Love this poem, I f e e l it and to me that's always a good quality in a poem.
And the last three lines fit perfectly, both in your choice of words, the length of the lines and the ending that wraps it all up. Well written ^^
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NotenSMSK Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Kind of reminds me of "Alluring secret, Black vow" the concept of love like an apple, quite well described. The ending manages to combine the work and the last line kind of gives it a direction. This played like a well formed commercial (I don't mean it as a negative thing) in which the aspects are given first and then finally moving on to the crux.
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you my dear. I am so sorry I haven't been around in so long, but I have been working on getting myself an apartment with the boyfriend and between that and working, I barely have time to breathe! :P
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NotenSMSK Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You are welcome. No need to apologize... everyone has their life and yours does seem busy :nod: and "the" boyfriend? ;) that is a strange way to put it :XD: well I hope all goes well and after the shifting I can see that you will be quite content :aww: Hope all goes well!
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FanaticalPublishing Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2013
Lovely work; if you still want to publish it, please send it to me at at fanaticalweekly@gmail.com
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you SO much!! I have emailed you!! :D
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FanaticalPublishing Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2013
I got it, thanks!
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