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Sweet and sensual,
The feel of your fingers on my skin.
Slow and longing,
The trail of your hands on my curves.
Languid and helpless,
The pulsing of my veins under your masterful strokes.

My love for you is like my love for apples.
Juicy, crunchy, delicious...
And as dark as a sinner's heart.
Sex is a beautiful thing. Especially when your partner treasures you. A play on original sin.
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MsPhantomessLOL Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2013
I love this poem. It's sensual and almost dark at the same time. Keep up the good work! :iconilavitplz:
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LightOverpowers58 Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013  Student Writer
"as dark as a sinner's heart"....or as vibrant as an angel's trumpet (or perhaps an apple's golden flesh)?

Wonderful poem, m'dear...the finest of simplistic sexuality :D
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KageMoon Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Apples are my favorite. If could work and get paid in apples, instead of money, I would!!!
Sex and passion are a marriage's irresistible overthrow
Beautiful, Sensual, great job!
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SteffenC-itsjustme Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
How about them apples!
- don't know why I thought about that, I just did :P

Love this poem, I f e e l it and to me that's always a good quality in a poem.
And the last three lines fit perfectly, both in your choice of words, the length of the lines and the ending that wraps it all up. Well written ^^
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NotenSMSK Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Kind of reminds me of "Alluring secret, Black vow" the concept of love like an apple, quite well described. The ending manages to combine the work and the last line kind of gives it a direction. This played like a well formed commercial (I don't mean it as a negative thing) in which the aspects are given first and then finally moving on to the crux.
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you my dear. I am so sorry I haven't been around in so long, but I have been working on getting myself an apartment with the boyfriend and between that and working, I barely have time to breathe! :P
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NotenSMSK Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You are welcome. No need to apologize... everyone has their life and yours does seem busy :nod: and "the" boyfriend? ;) that is a strange way to put it :XD: well I hope all goes well and after the shifting I can see that you will be quite content :aww: Hope all goes well!
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FanaticalPublishing Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2013
Lovely work; if you still want to publish it, please send it to me at at fanaticalweekly@gmail.com
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you SO much!! I have emailed you!! :D
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FanaticalPublishing Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2013
I got it, thanks!
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HarukaMoon Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013  Student Writer
very descriptive- I like it
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!! :D
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HarukaMoon Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013  Student Writer
You're welcome
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Devlin26 Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013
totally agree
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:hug:
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BlowYourHeartOpen Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Very... sensual.
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!! :D
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symphonyoftheheart Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Wow so beautiful!!!! And agreed;)
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you soo much! :D
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symphonyoftheheart Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
You're welcome!:)
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1gee98 Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2013
The moment when you think that the poem was going to be unsexual because the title said "Apples" and as you read the first paragraph you thought it was sexual but decided not to say so until the next paragraph.

You got me there, sir/madam.
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:glomp: Heehee! Thanks!! :D
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1gee98 Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013
You're welcome~:iconbowplz:
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ArtbugCarl Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2013  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
So much said in such a small space. Incredibly sensual and erotically descriptive. Well done.
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you soooo much! :D
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ArtbugCarl Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
You're so very welcome.
I always look forward to your passionate perspectives and feel satiated by the end.
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aVaelerian Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2013  Student Writer
Very well done. The original sin play is great.
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you for saying that! :D
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MarianaErwin555 Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2013
*UntamedUnwanted, this is one good poem. It's like the fruit of the tree of the knowledge of good and evil.
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!! :D I am so glad you enjoyed it. :)
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MarianaErwin555 Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2013
You are so welcome! :D
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Svitavotara Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2013
Beauteous poem. Delicious too. :meow:
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :D
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Ensaru64 Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Apple visualization!!!
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Indeed!! :D
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Soleospace Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2013  Student General Artist
The first paragraph is EXTREMELY sexual....
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
;)
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CutToTheSex Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2013
Beautiful little poem.
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!! :D
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GoWeegie Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:iconhmmmmmmplz: My...
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:D
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irrenderNarr42 Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
ohohoh...this sounds like REAL fun:D
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Kurt in general is a lot of fun. He inspires me to write stuff I have never written before. :P
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irrenderNarr42 Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Now that sounds REALLY interesting:D
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IMACHILINWITHMALAZER Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2013
This is positively gorgeous. I mean, it perfectly personifies the term 'short and sweet.'
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!! :D
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