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“We need to ta- what are you looking at?”

"A horoscope."

"Oh...but I thought you didn't like them."

“Actually, I hate horoscopes. They lie every single damned time.”

“Not to me they don’t.”

“Sure. You were saying something.”

“We need to break up.”

“I agree.”

“Huh?”

“I fell in love with you before you were the boy who sang about my problems in your songs, and before you tried to evolve me into your version of a better me and before I saw how you treated your neighbour’s dog and before I knew how much you believed in horoscopes.”

“What’s wrong with horoscopes?”

“Nothing, except for the fact that you never really thought of it as a novel idea that you share the same day as one twelfth of the world.”

“Well you aren’t-”

“I’m not so perfect myself, I know. You loved me better before you read my poetry and understood how damaged I was and knowing about my temper tantrums and wished I wasn’t so intensely passionate about my pipe dreams.”

“Everything is always so logically put with you.”

“What do you expect? I gave you my heart a year and a half ago and you’ve had them both beating in your chest to keep you strong. Now you’re going to give it back, all broken and damaged and I'm going to break with it.”

“This is it, then.”

“It’s been a long time coming.”

“You already knew?”

“Oh baby. I knew it was broken the minute I began to look at horoscopes to tell me how we were going to make it through the day.”
Some people follow every single word their horoscopes say to the point that they make them true. This is one of those stories with one of those people.

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Madam-G Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Normally, I don't care much for poetry but this is really interesting to me. ^ ^ 
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LadyBrookeCelebwen Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is lovely. :D I really like how the dialogue drives the story.
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Crystal-Magic13 Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer

Self fulfilling prophecy. I love how logical it all is.

Everything you write has devastating logic.

I love "you never really thought of it as a novel idea

that you share the same day as one twelfth of the world.”

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:iconuntamedunwanted:
UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you my dear. :hug:
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HikariTeiruzu Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
so nice :)

Reading this really does make me believe that there are such people out there in the world.
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:iconuntamedunwanted:
UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much. :)
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Cyn-Alucard Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2013  Student General Artist
I decided to look through some of your writing, since you looked at some of mine... I really like this one.. 
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:iconuntamedunwanted:
UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:hug: Thank you, my dear. :)
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Miss-simple Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2013
whoah ! great  !!!!!!
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:iconuntamedunwanted:
UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:)
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DyskoDelThunderback Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2013
Love the way you use conversations to tell a story. I sat back and realized I hadn't given a single thought to where they were, what they looked like, anything. But for this I didn't have to. It's refreshing to see writing that's actually story-driven. Keep it up :)
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much, my dear. That means a lot to me. I love writing dialogue pieces for the focus to be on the words rather than the characters. :)
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DyskoDelThunderback Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2013
I wanna try more like that.
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R-J-S-KING Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I had fun reading this. it was poetic and kind of funny at the same time like a well written comic strip from a news paper  
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:iconuntamedunwanted:
UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much. :hug:
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R-J-S-KING Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:)
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Teirra-Misaki Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2013  Student General Artist

amazing work as always. and of course, also always hits home somehow too

I wish my writing could be this great...I wonder if its because I get too personal with mine...hm. idk

I keep trying and trying and when I do post some of my own writing it pretty much never gets looked at either. its a real downer most times...

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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you my dear. :hug: I am sorry to hear about that. :(
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Teirra-Misaki Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2013  Student General Artist

thank you again for looking at my work!!

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Kailani-e Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Amazing job. The poem tells a very intriguing story, and also is quite mind boggling. As to which person is following the horoscopes completely. Wonderful! 
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you my dear. :hug:
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Kailani-e Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
You're welcome :hug:
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confidenceAlive Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Self-fulfilled prophecy, aye xD

crazy people.

Well-put.
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Hahah!! :P Thank you!
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PokeNOMNOMNOM Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Oooh.
These words flow nicely, I really like this.
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:iconuntamedunwanted:
UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much. :heart:
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Captive-Hearts Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2013  Student General Artist
Totally beautiful <3
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :)
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Kuiji Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I loved this! The title drew me in and the wonderful use of language kept me. Nice!
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:iconuntamedunwanted:
UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! :)
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ObeseQueen Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I just love this!
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!! :)
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ZEPHIEL Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
I hope you become even more passionate for your pipe dreams.
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:iconuntamedunwanted:
UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I have for sure. I'm going to do exactly what I have dreamt of. :)
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ZEPHIEL Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
^_^
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irrenderNarr42 Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
she does not look up, does she?
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:iconuntamedunwanted:
UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Nope. The stars freak her out. XP
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irrenderNarr42 Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
XD
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Jphyper Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2013
Sometimes I check the horoscopes, but only if I need a laugh. They're either hilariously inaccurate and inapplicable to me or filled with generic advice that would apply to anyone.
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is so true. I think the same. :D
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EpickBlonde666 Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
"we were make it through the day.”
I think you might have left out a word (:
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! Fixed that!! :)
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cLaIrEbY Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2013
Beautifully expressed
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:iconuntamedunwanted:
UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :hug:
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silvioricardonelli Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
a untamed unwanted poem, is the best writer that i meet in deviantart, i really love her poems.
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you soooo much!! :)
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silvioricardonelli Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
you deserve my praise, I love your ingenuity and your humility, your simplicity and the way you say things, really touch my heart

(tú mereces mi elogio, amo tu inventiva y tu humildad, tu simpleza y tu forma de decir las cosas, realmente me llegan al corazón)
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mintybreeze Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Very nicely paced. 
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:iconuntamedunwanted:
UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! :)
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Vainamoinenian Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This was really catchy. I felt the moment entirely. Nice work, again. 
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