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"You're mixing water in your coke again."

"I know."

"You do that when you worry."

"I'm always worried."

"No, you're usually cinnamon-in-your-tea worried. This is water-in-coke worried and that is seriously beginning to freak me out."

"I know."

"..."

"What?"

"What are you worried about?"

"You're going to think it's stupid."

"Try me."

"Well...do you ever wonder about the kind of guy you're waiting for?"

"I think we all wonder about that guy, love."

"I've been thinking about him more often than not lately. What he would be like, I mean."

"Oh. Well...if it helps any, I know what mine would be like."

"Really?"

"Sure. He will be tall, so I have to stand on my toes to kiss him. He will be kind so I can tell him anything without fearing him judging me. He will be strong so he can carry me when I fall."

"Wow. Sounds like you have this figured out. I guess we all have some idea about what our soulmate should be like."

"You know what yours will be like then?"

"Who, me?"

"No, I'm talking to the little green man standing behind you."

"What?! Shit! He's back!"

"Very funny."

"I am, thanks."

"So you know what your soulmate will be like?"

"Sure."

"And?"

"He'll love me like he has never ever known what its like to be in mind stiring, bone crushing, soul shaking, heart breaking, completely fractured love ever before. And he should like cinnamon. "
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In the meantime, I'm going to have more cinnamon in my tea. :)
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:iconthesungazer:
The dialogue sounds so natural!
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~valkvick Aug 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is great. The very last sentence really clinches it for me, but I really liked it throughout, too. A truly serious topic with enough humor to really lighten the mood. And you're so good with the dialogue! I hate writing dialogue...lol.
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=divafica Aug 24, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
You've been featured here: [link] :w00t:
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~OuroborosRagnarok Aug 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Who doesn't like cinnamon? I love how candid and natural the dialogue is. Frankly, I'd be surprised to hear this exact conversation hasn't happened to you before. ;)
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:iconrhianimation:
my favorite lines in that apart from all of it was:

"Who, me?"

"No, I'm talking to the little green man standing behind you."

"What?! Shit! He's back!"

"Very funny."

"I am, thanks."


"What?! Shit! He's back" << BEST! love it!!
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:icontiraluv:
:D This is adorable. I also love cinnamon on anything. Try baking it on chicken XD I tried predicting what my soul mate would be like, and the first guy I ever truly loved was the fine line between complete opposite and exactly what I thought. >.> So, now I've decided to just go with it.
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!FlyingFishPeople Jul 30, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You remind me of Hemingway, though that may not be entirely accurate...I only read one thing he wrote. In any case, this is really beautiful.
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Mood: Love *SnapShot120 Jul 22, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I love how it sounds so realistic. Like normal speech. But what ties it all together is the ending statement. I think that's only because it's called "Cinnamon Souls." Amazing how the title can make that much of a difference to it's writing.

"Cinnamon Souls" is a really good name, by the way. It's a really good phrase, actually. Sounds so dreamy. But it's still down to earth somehow.

Anyway, nice job and very unique concept. I love it!
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*Daveinwilton Jul 21, 2012  Professional Photographer
This is awesome!!!
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~SkyeSteiner Jul 18, 2012  Student Writer
Those gerunds...had an imaginary bone crushing experience
And still :heart: made me think "My soulmate's walking around the earth right now"
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