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"Tell me what you think."

"Of the poem?"

"No, of my face. Yes, the poem."

"I was going to say, because your face is just stupid."

"Very funny. Read."

"..."

"What did you think?"

"Why did you write this?"

"I wrote it for you."

"For me?"

"Yes."

"You make me self conscious when you say things like that."

"I know."

"I'm not worth this you know."

"What does that mean?"

"I am half a girl, and I deserve half a poem."

"That is not true, and you still haven't told me what you really thought about it."

"It's as broken and complex and half hearted as a sad song about the way you feel ink trail between your fingers like it's blood. There is no reason for it, it's the kind of beautiful that is there just for being there. It happened, it's a moment in time forever frozen and to be remembered in a way that candles that burn in holy places should be. It's a forever, all by itself- Why are you looking at me like that?"

"Because you believe you deserve half a poem."

"I do. I am too damaged and broken and unhinged to deserve a full one."

"You are damaged and broken and unhinged. But so are shooting stars and comets."
I am so fortunate to find a boy who loves poetry as much as I do. And I am even more fortunate that he and I can actually find inspiration in each other.

My K. You are the Knight I was looking for all this time. I wrote about you long before you came into my life. Thank you for being my poetry writing, soul baring, four spined boy. I mean everything I said. I would never ever change a hair on your head.



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Amenarae Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Wow... This is really beautiful and funny and just.... Wow...

"You are damaged and broken and unhinged. But so are shooting stars and comets."
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chancerox Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
i guess this kind of brought hope for me a little. this type of relationship is captivating and timeless, has the ink stains of typewriters all over it and papyrus and dittos and i love it so much.
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saltwaterlungs Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I have no idea what it is about pieces only made of dialogue, but I love them. I especially love this one. The plot was great and the rising action and climax where very well done. In fact, I take it back, the rising action was fantastic. It just kept building and buildingn up to this awesome climaz, and wow, great job right there. You also manage to reveal the characters (especially the boy) in a wonderful way, and only through dialogue. Great job!
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theolivethief14 Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is so beautiful :love:
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CindyJade Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is so adorable! I'm happy that you've found someone worthwhile and with whom you can share your passion. I wish you two a lifetime of happiness! :aww:
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SteffenC-itsjustme Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I don't think I've ever gotten that response "I am not worth this", when I've given something I've written to a girlfriend..don't know if that's a comment on my writing skills, the girlfriends I've had or the relationships I've had with them..hmm. But I digress.

I love the poem and how it's tied together at the end. Showing the depth within the person receiving the poem, which lets us know that the person is definately worth the poem..very nice.

and I'm so happy for you. I love to read about a love like that <3
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forestmeetwildfire Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is so beautiful :love: Anyone who can write like this certainly deserves a whole poem. Or two. :giggle:
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much!! :D
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MintyMintamin Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
i'm glad you found someone in this world. . .
i wish you will have, as the story goes, a happy ending.

you deserve that, and much much more.


take care, may the balance of life feel fit to welcome you in its arms. . .
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so very much for your lovely words. :D
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MintyMintamin Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You are welcome, my dear.
I wondered if, you'll come back from the dream of reality, but I dare not wish to let you surface, for it does sound like a dream. A dream that you shouldn't wake up half-finished.
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Rojozorra Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2012  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
This is lovely sorry it took so long to read. :heart:
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haikaree Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
It is so beautiful. I could write a damn long comment again x) but I don't want to be telling you the same things over and over. Your poems are just always so real and touching.
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Krusnik03 Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow! First word that came into my head. x'D Your writing is beautiful as always, and as always, the last line is the one that does it for me. Your literature is so clever. :) I hope you and K continue to be happy together!

And last but not least, you are always deserving of a full poem.
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silvioricardonelli Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
tú eres un escritor superlativo
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Kailani-e Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
This is beautiful. I'm so happy for you two! ^_^
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tepeon Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2012
This is beautiful xxx
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mintybreeze Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
The last line was perfect:heart:
"You are damaged and broken and unhinged. But so are shooting stars and comets."
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waiting-for-wings Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
its lovely
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Versivalia Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Beautiful is barely an adequate word to describe this.
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Sigma-Echo-Seven Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2012  Student Writer
I was skeptical at first, but the ending easily had me near tears. Well done!
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BegginerMay Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2012  Student Artist
this is so amazing.
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LightOverpowers58 Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2012  Student Writer
You keep bringing up four spines...why?

That question out of the way (it has been plaguing me since you first mentioned it in another piece), I cannot honestly tell you what I think. I am failing to offer constructive criticism, in fact, why should I do so? Nothing I can say can possibly measure up against the magnificent work you have written, so why try?

I am overwhelmingly happy that you and K are working out and I pray your relationship will prosper and deepen by leaps and bounds!

(and that he will break you of your self-deprecating habit....a very idiotic one if I may, perhaps with him you will learn that you are worth every positive thing [and more] that comes your way.)

Enchanting piece, my dear!
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ScilicetNimisVirgo Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Awwwwwwwwwww. I love it, it's beautiful.
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Clockworkbirds Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2012  Student Digital Artist
This was just...
Breath taking, in every single way possible.
Amazing.
Beautiful.
You are a very lucky person, to have found someone you can love so dearly, some of us don't get that honor.
But really :iconbravoplz: you never fail to impress!
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Derpymailexpress Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
While I am still :iconforeveraloneplz: I read about people finding love. :iconsadokayplz:
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ElegantDragonMaster Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2012
wow amazing o.o...
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Cinders-Rose Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2012
Well done hun, stunning words once again, loved the line about stars and comets being unhinged, my friend once said that she was only half full and damaged, my reply was if she is only half done and she is that amazing then she is going to rule the skies when she is full x
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NotenSMSK Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
While I deeply respect Mr K to be there for you, I do wonder why the initial K :hmm: it could be "my special one" or something... nevermind that. As a work this is unique for me. I usually do not see many works written in purely dialogues and on a topic that first amuses the reader: constructive criticism. But it worked well. I liked the emotions in it and the play of words. In all honesty, I do not use such phrases in real life (since this reflects real life) and feel it like a movies script or drama but then again... that is me. If someone does, conciously critique a work like that then... well either they don't know what they are saying (referring to a good friend of mine) or they are really good with literature and words and expressing emotions, killing the reader (hence Mr K.). Over all, lovely piece, the start makes one smile and appreciate the relationship between you and K. IF by any chance, I managed to offend you with my words either about you, the work, or Mr K, I am sorry and that was not intended...

P.S the thing about changing the hair on his head.... well you CAN'T change it... I guess people are right when they say I don't get romance ^^;
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MetalPorSiempre Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
the last coment, about shootinh+g stars and comets remembered me of that katy perry video, fireworks

i love all you write, it's so real life
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ScabbingETERNITY Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2012
the most beautiful things in the world are sometimes the most broken things too.

I'm glad you got to meet your knight (in shining armour, I presume?).
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NoodlesAddict Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
very touching and real!
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byza12 Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Beautiful! I wish I find someone like that.
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NanaNear Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2012  Student Writer
This amazing and just pure, <3.
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spockezri Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
so lovely <3
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MurphyParys Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
<3
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DoomedLucid Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2012
Love it.
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UnluckyNumberXIII Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
The last line is beautiful.
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Siren-Badru Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2012  Student General Artist
...AWW....I have to admit I actually said that when I read the last line XD
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dragonlily29 Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
:') beautiful
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FlameDeLeon Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2012  Student General Artist
This is absolutely beautiful. The language is lovely, and it just makes me smile reading the adorable simplicity of it. Wonderful. <3
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NaimaAldarion Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2012  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
This is lovely!
You are very lucky indeed!
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MoonliteMeadows Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I saw this on the front page and knew before I opened it that it was yours :) I love your work, as always, and I'm so happy you've found such a special boy :)
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Kyndsie Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Wow. Just... wow.
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IseedeadCUPCAKES Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2012
Lucky! I can't even get anyone an appropriate age to pay attention to me. Only old men think I'm attractive(There's this one greeter at sam's club and he is hilarious, always flirts with the ladies as they leave) and only little kids think my personality is worth anything. Your so lucky that he sees how beautiful you are(because beautiful people have beautiful art, seeing as it comes from inside of them where all their beauty originates) and that he is so obviously amazing, he must be if you love him.
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VoxMagi Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2012   Writer
Wonderful writing. Written simply yet the words speak even louder. It leaves it's own kind of impression and I doubt that anyone who comes and reads this will ever forget it. I know I won't. Bravo!
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pasztorgergo Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2012  Student Writer
This is lovely, really.
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Pand0ru Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2012  Student General Artist
that was really beautiful :rose: you're incredibly blessed to have someone like that in your life ^_^
(goes to check out more of your work)
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BromocresolGreen Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2012  Student General Artist
beautiful and touching. good job and keep up the good work
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