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"Tell me what you think."

"Of the poem?"

"No, of my face. Yes, the poem."

"I was going to say, because your face is just stupid."

"Very funny. Read."

"..."

"What did you think?"

"Why did you write this?"

"I wrote it for you."

"For me?"

"Yes."

"You make me self conscious when you say things like that."

"I know."

"I'm not worth this you know."

"What does that mean?"

"I am half a girl, and I deserve half a poem."

"That is not true, and you still haven't told me what you really thought about it."

"It's as broken and complex and half hearted as a sad song about the way you feel ink trail between your fingers like it's blood. There is no reason for it, it's the kind of beautiful that is there just for being there. It happened, it's a moment in time forever frozen and to be remembered in a way that candles that burn in holy places should be. It's a forever, all by itself- Why are you looking at me like that?"

"Because you believe you deserve half a poem."

"I do. I am too damaged and broken and unhinged to deserve a full one."

"You are damaged and broken and unhinged. But so are shooting stars and comets."
I am so fortunate to find a boy who loves poetry as much as I do. And I am even more fortunate that he and I can actually find inspiration in each other.

My K. You are the Knight I was looking for all this time. I wrote about you long before you came into my life. Thank you for being my poetry writing, soul baring, four spined boy. I mean everything I said. I would never ever change a hair on your head.



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Amenarae Jul 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Wow... This is really beautiful and funny and just.... Wow...

"You are damaged and broken and unhinged. But so are shooting stars and comets."
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chancerox Jul 7, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
i guess this kind of brought hope for me a little. this type of relationship is captivating and timeless, has the ink stains of typewriters all over it and papyrus and dittos and i love it so much.
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saltwaterlungs Apr 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I have no idea what it is about pieces only made of dialogue, but I love them. I especially love this one. The plot was great and the rising action and climax where very well done. In fact, I take it back, the rising action was fantastic. It just kept building and buildingn up to this awesome climaz, and wow, great job right there. You also manage to reveal the characters (especially the boy) in a wonderful way, and only through dialogue. Great job!
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theolivethief14 Jan 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is so beautiful :love:
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CindyJade Jan 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is so adorable! I'm happy that you've found someone worthwhile and with whom you can share your passion. I wish you two a lifetime of happiness! :aww:
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SteffenC-itsjustme Jan 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I don't think I've ever gotten that response "I am not worth this", when I've given something I've written to a girlfriend..don't know if that's a comment on my writing skills, the girlfriends I've had or the relationships I've had with them..hmm. But I digress.

I love the poem and how it's tied together at the end. Showing the depth within the person receiving the poem, which lets us know that the person is definately worth the poem..very nice.

and I'm so happy for you. I love to read about a love like that <3
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forestmeetwildfire Dec 1, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is so beautiful :love: Anyone who can write like this certainly deserves a whole poem. Or two. :giggle:
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UntamedUnwanted Dec 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much!! :D
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MintyMintamin Nov 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
i'm glad you found someone in this world. . .
i wish you will have, as the story goes, a happy ending.

you deserve that, and much much more.


take care, may the balance of life feel fit to welcome you in its arms. . .
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