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Constructive Criticism

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"Tell me what you think."

"Of the poem?"

"No, of my face. Yes, the poem."

"I was going to say, because your face is just stupid."

"Very funny. Read."

"..."

"What did you think?"

"Why did you write this?"

"I wrote it for you."

"For me?"

"Yes."

"You make me self conscious when you say things like that."

"I know."

"I'm not worth this you know."

"What does that mean?"

"I am half a girl, and I deserve half a poem."

"That is not true, and you still haven't told me what you really thought about it."

"It's as broken and complex and half hearted as a sad song about the way you feel ink trail between your fingers like it's blood. There is no reason for it, it's the kind of beautiful that is there just for being there. It happened, it's a moment in time forever frozen and to be remembered in a way that candles that burn in holy places should be. It's a forever, all by itself- Why are you looking at me like that?"

"Because you believe you deserve half a poem."

"I do. I am too damaged and broken and unhinged to deserve a full one."

"You are damaged and broken and unhinged. But so are shooting stars and comets."
I am so fortunate to find a boy who loves poetry as much as I do. And I am even more fortunate that he and I can actually find inspiration in each other.

My K. You are the Knight I was looking for all this time. I wrote about you long before you came into my life. Thank you for being my poetry writing, soul baring, four spined boy. I mean everything I said. I would never ever change a hair on your head.



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Amenarae's avatar
Wow... This is really beautiful and funny and just.... Wow...

"You are damaged and broken and unhinged. But so are shooting stars and comets."