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She was the Thief Girl with no faith and half a heart, and she didn't care if they never ever saw her soul anyway. She was almost content in the half broken life she had created for herself. Her fingers were always drenched in ink, her mind was always preoccupied with her treasure. Words stolen from conversations, from homes, from mouths that didn't need to speak any more.

She found the Lost Boy somewhere in an alley of poetry and a war of lyrics, fighting for his life with a broken piano and a worn tuxedo. She stole him before the bass viols, the gleaming guitars and the thrashing drums could kill him.

He fought with her all the way, telling her that they would never hurt him, but she had seen their wooden hands outstretching to wring his neck. When he spoke again, this time, calmer, he asked her, "What do you want from me?"

"Just your words."

"I lost my words a long time ago."

"I will help you find them, then."

"I never asked for your help."

"But you shall have it anyway."

"Why?"

"Because you write songs that are always about hopelessness."

"And how do you think you can help?"

"Have you tried God lately?"

"Oh for- are you serious?!"

"What did you ask him?"

"Come on-"

"I already know you asked him something. Even the atheists asked once upon a time. It's how they became atheists."

"…"

"Say it."

"I asked him why I failed at everything I do. Why my music won't make anyone smile, why I can't play the lyrics I write, why my words disappear. Why I'm such a failure."

"And did you get a response?

"I…did, yes."

"What did he-"

"God said no."

"And what do you think He meant by it?"

"That I was too much of a failure to be worth His time eit-I'm glad that my pain amuses you."

"You misunderstood. That's why I'm smiling."

"So...you have a better answer then."

"I do."

"Better than God?"

"Yes."

"What...is it?"

"All failures at their very core are happy accidents just waiting to get you to the best thing that would ever happen to you."

And that is how a thief girl rescued a lost boy and found him his words again.
100 Themes: Failure

I write this in my darkest hour, hoping to convince myself that there is hope for someone like me out there. In truth, I found the beauty in loneliness, the empathy in defeat and the poignant way of sadness. And just when I knew what it was like to be alone...

God said NO.

EDIT: Minor sentence/grammar editing done.
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:iconhammer777:
hammer777 Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2014
Is it bad that I always envision God saying no like the Engineer from TF2?
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tiraluv Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2012
I have no words for this. This is... amazing. I love this, so much. :D
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MndaScott Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2012  Student General Artist
God loves.
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Tinkster95 Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I know how this person feels, its an amazing topic choice.
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novelist888 Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2012
I love this. Well besides that, I am creating a website about a sci-fi galaxy. The website will be a bookstore for books about this galaxy. Already, in a few months, I have about ten writers interested. I hope you also will be interested. Well if you are, contact me.
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starshinexx Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Gorgeoous as always, your so freaking lovely <3
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dancingkat33 Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2011
Beautiful!
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Sana-girl Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Im speechless over this story. Its poignant. Its inspirational. Its just so damn beautiful I cant comment.
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PuniTotoro Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2011
again your words are so beautiful!!!!!! i wish there were more words to describe just how great your works really are, and also i'm so happy to hear you believe in God too!!!! its so nice to see more believers out there ^^ and that throughout hard times you still acknowledge His existence :D and also, the rediscovering of a lost faith only makes you a stronger believer~ just as failures prepare you for special moments. Our pastor had a special sermon on this with the story of Peter - he failed Jesus many times but became one of the greatest disciples in all history :))))
Also if you have time have a listen to MercyMe's song "Homesick"~ i find its a great song to listen to if you have lost loved ones to death :hug:
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
That song is so stunningly beautiful. I sat here with tears streaming down my cheeks until my room mate came in and hugged me :lol:...thank you for sharing this with me. :heart:
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PuniTotoro Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2011
D: aw i didnt mean to make you cry!! ><" but i teared up anyway too when i listened to it~ happy that you could listen to it ^^ and may God continue to give you strength to get you through any troubles and trials you face!!!!!
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Other5317 Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2011
They carelessly mine the endless depths of the soul -- thinking that there is nothing to fear.
They realize (all too late) that this cannot happen without exhausting the reasources of the heart.
They will care about their oversight if they can be bothered to do so.

Everyone will take. Extremely few (if any, at all) will give. The vault must open in order to receive.
Do you have sufficient funding to risk robbery? Choose wisely.

If God commands the risk, know that it is not wrong to hold him accountable and that divinity often requires investment prior to irreversable return.
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I was missing you. Thank you for writing those words. Everything you say resonates so true. :glomp:
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Other5317 Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2011
I cannot properly describe my reaction to your response.
I will not bring shame to your gallery by an indignant comment that attempts to try.

That being said, your response is something to be cherished (possibly forever).
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Dezi-chan Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2011
You never cease to amaze, my dear. :) I hope things get better for you <3
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! :glomp:
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Crystal-Magic13 Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
:hug:
It's alright girl, pain is the new beautiful.
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Pain is truly the new beautiful. :heart:
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disturbingcalamity Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2011
"I already know you asked him something. Even the atheists asked once upon a time. It's how they became atheists."
I love all your writing, it's all so beautiful.
You somehow make every emotion into something that resonates within you long after you've read it.
And that line... Struck a chord with me.
I love this piece, it's sad, and makes your heart ache, but at the same time, it's like a melancholy beauty. And in every single one of your peices, there's always a saviour, even if that saviour at the time being is only hope.
Really, your work always moves me.
You're an extremely talented woman.
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
You're far too kind with your praise. I thank you for taking the time to read this piece. :hug:
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disturbingcalamity Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2011
I've read every single piece in your gallery ^^
They're all amazing, but I hate spamming comments onto peoples pages haha!
You're beautiful! :hug:
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MoonliteMeadows Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Amazing. Cheer up, life always gets better, at least for a while.
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you darling. Yes, there is always light at the end of every tunnel...
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MoonliteMeadows Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
No prob Hun :D. Hey, can you check out "A Homecoming" in my gallery :?? I worked on it really hard, and your critique always means a lot :) It's kinda sad though, so I understand if you don't want to
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Waldo-Butters Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Cheer up dear, everything gets better for you again. Trust me. (I skipped to the last chapter. Its really a wonderful ending)
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Awww...you're the sweetest Waldo. :hug:
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Waldo-Butters Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Oh I wouldn't say sweet, more that sugary aftertaste you get from drinking Coca-cola. To much will rot your teeth and give me an ego that's really in need of deflating...
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Shirory Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2011
sorry, but in the second paragraph you said "viols"...what are those?
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
[link]

:) I just thought they would make an interesting contrast. :)
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Shirory Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2011
cool! I learned something new today...
btw, I play the VIOLa <3
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daydreamer1324 Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
It seems as if I have lost my words. Only one word comes to mind, breathtaking...
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you for saying that. :)
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Esurio Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2011
Beautiful. The best writing is something we all can relate to.
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! :)
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Esurio Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2011
You're welcome :)
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Painapurru Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2011
Been there done that. Beautiful portrayal of a very real scenario! I adore your word choice.
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! :hug:
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haggard85 Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2011
I head to read this three times. Not because it didn't make sense, but for just how deeply it went. I am ever amazed at one who can feel the pain yet can cry out in love's defense. There is always hope, always reason to keep believing, even it is only because of our own fucking existence. I know and share the darkened heart, but I stil and will always believe that there will always be hope. God may say no...but there are still thos of use who will and do love you...
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Your words make me tear up. :hug: Thank you for giving me such wonderfully moving words.
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cosmosgoddess13 Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2011
omg, this is wonderful. You're final sentences always wrap this up nicely and the last phrase spoken in this work is VERY inspirational. :3
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much. :hug: As always, your words keep me going. :)
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cosmosgoddess13 Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2011
They aren't just words, they're the truth :)
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polinjonok Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2011  Hobbyist Artist
very.. very personal to everyone)
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
:hug:
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Devlin26 Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2011
I felt myself so very there inside your story. That's the beauty of a broken soul, one not giving up on shinning. I loved the thief girl. Sometimes I have her too.
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. We all need a thief girl sometimes. :)
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ixDenial Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2011   Digital Artist
Amazing ! This is exactly what i imagine God's answer's meanings if it's a no.

Guys, God loves you, If he says no, It's for the better, Trust me. (:
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Awww...so true. Thank you for reading this! :)
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ixDenial Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2011   Digital Artist
<3
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West-117 Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2011
This is perfectly wonderful!
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