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Grace disliked Tinkerbell. She disliked her because she had wings and she could fly whereas Grace stayed on the ground, catching fireflies. The fireflies, in turn, made it easy because they knew she would let them go. She would stare at their radiant light in awe and try to understand how something so little could shine so very bright.

She tried to pretend the bread she had in the mornings was ice cream flavoured, and even imagined her little brother had never been taken from them but had been enthralled and forever lost in Neverland. When she tried to explain this to her mother, her mother would look away quietly, and sometimes, rise with a quiet shudder...and leave the room.

For a little girl who had the hope of the world resting quite easily on her head as a crown, she knew. She knew that one day, he would come for her and maybe, maybe they could be together again like they were in her dreams.

As she grew older, she slept on a bed of green, with a desk of wood and a massive window that made her love rooftops and the sky. She didn’t want to meet Peter Pan. She wanted to be him, and lead a group of boys who were more lost that she could ever be. So lost that they were found.

Grace's mind was made up when she saw the missing boy posters all over milk cartons. She knew what she would be when she grew up. She would be Peter Pan.

(The irony of this never quite occurred to her until her twenty second birthday, when the boy she loved and knew to be less than perfect, became perfect by losing himself to her forever.)
I can't resist these because my novel is a bit of a fractured fairytale. I wanted you to take a glimpse of the characters I am building for it (They have been around a while and I have written about them before...these same stories). Meet Grace. She wants to be Peter Pan for all the right reasons. :heart:

First Alyssa, then Grace. Two more lovely people to go. :)

PS. I am finally finding my way into the world of traditional publishing. Just got off the phone with someone who enjoyed the manuscript of my book and is interested in publishing it!

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PhoenixEverAfter Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Its so awsome your writting a book.i had no idea, but i want to read it!
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FanaticalPublishing Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2013
Lovely work, thank you for submitting this; I'll be sure to feature it in the next issue. As a contributor, you are entitled to a free subscription. If you haven't yet. you can claim it by writing to me at fanaticalweekly@gmail.com
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Rojozorra Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2013  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
This is beautiful, I like Grace.
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Blissful-Day-Dreamer Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2013  Student Writer
And will she swim with mermaids and dance with the Indians?
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
She definitely will. ;)
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ArtesianFount Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is wonderful! Everything I could have wanted for a story like this. Can't wait to see what happens with it in the full version! (I hope she's a pirate ;D )
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you from the bottom of my heart dearest! :)
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Ahalteke Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:glomp: oh my gosh this is so god damn perfect. -cry- 
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much, my dearest!
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MistressofQuills Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2013  Student Writer
Oh wow I love this so much!:heart: So many contradictions and paradoxes in her thinking, but it makes sense anyway - brilliant! I wish you all the luck in the world with your publishing endeavors!
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
WOW! Thank you so much, my dearest! That is high praise! :D
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MistressofQuills Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2013  Student Writer
Haha, welll I just speak the truth:D You're very welcome!
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tirzacantfail Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2013  Hobbyist
awh <3 yayy =u= Good luck with your publishing!
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much!! :glomp:
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gymnastgirlflips Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2013
I absolutely loved this. It was so interesting and magical... captivating. I hope you do get your book published. :)
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Awwww, thank you so much for your kindness and your lovely wishes. :)
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cmsully Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
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tirzacantfail Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2013  Hobbyist
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KissSh0t Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2013  Student Writer
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Phantasm1 Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oh this sounds interesting. Her character is fascinating.
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much, my dearest!! :glomp: :hug:
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Phantasm1 Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome :) :huggle:
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irrenderNarr42 Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
a sweet twist^^
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :glomp:
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irrenderNarr42 Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
^^
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NotenSMSK Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is quite a nice short work. The language like most of your works (most that I have read at least) is simple yet expressive - somehow you manage to convey emotions through very simple words that otherwise seems impossible.

I didn't fully get the final line in the bracket although the format very distantly seemed similar to one of my fav works from you: "Obsession" but then again I didn't get the last line. I am assuming that it is related to the story itself. Over all a beautiful work.
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you for my lovely insightful comment, my dearest. :hug: Did you get a chance to see my note? I would love a chance to feature your piece. :)
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NotenSMSK Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You are welcome. :hug: Yes I did and ignore the first reply :stare: other than the thanks in it :huggle: I kind of read misread something ^^; ignore what I proposed!!!!!! I would feel very embarrassed if that got featured :faint:
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Krystella Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2013
Beautiful!
I hope you get your book published. I love your writing. 
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much!! :hug: That means a lot to me!
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Krystella Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2013
you're welcome!
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RalfMaximus Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Sweet and haunting. Love the rhythm of this, like it should be spoken aloud.
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
That is high praise, thank you so much. :hug:
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RalfMaximus Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Highly earned. :)
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LightOverpowers58 Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2013  Student Writer
Wonderful prose hun, partifularly the last line, that's the one that makes the entire piece unique.

Congrats on the interest....of course we never doubted you sooo, just goes to show ;P

Can you please try to make hardcopies available in the States, no matter who you publish with...living with no credit card makes it hard to buy things online :(
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much, my lovely. You are absolutely amazing for saying that.

I will make sure that no matter what happens, you get a copy for SURE!! :hug: (I really hope this happens in the first place...I am so nervous about the whole thing, I feel like it is a dream!)
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LightOverpowers58 Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2013  Student Writer
You always thank me for telling the truth...but you are welcome

I can't wait to read it...it's going to happen, hun. If not with this publisher or even this book then it will be with an infinitely better one on both accounts.

Point Right  Reading : what everyone will be doing once your book hits the stores.
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NekoNekoGirl997 Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
... I'm going to buy your book faster then it's put on the shelf.
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oh my dearest, that makes me so so happy to hear! Thank you for believing in me! :hug:
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NekoNekoGirl997 Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You're very welcome, friend.
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Sutsuki-Sensei Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2013
I really love how this was written. Very simple, but with enough emotion to bring it home. It's also kind of personal since my main OC, persona and pen-name is Sarah Grace. Anyway, I do love how you wrote this. :) It's very beautiful.
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much, my dearest. It is good to see you again! :D
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Sutsuki-Sensei Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2013
You're very welcome ^-^ And it's good to see you again as well :)
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kaelamae Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2013  Student Writer
This is ridiculously beautiful. Am I selfish to think that it is I you are writing about? Because this, reminds me of myself.
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Awww, I am so glad you relate so much to it. :glomp: :hug:
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MetalPorSiempre Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Good going with your manuscript... Be sure to let us know when it's out! I will buy it by all means.
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much for saying that, that means so much to me! :glomp: :heart:
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A-Wakefield Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You are wonderfully and magically brilliant in the form of storytelling and I wish you the very best of luck with your new endeavor! :D :hug:
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