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I call them fragments, the parts of me that were too exhausted to stay. He calls them flecks because I am a flake. I wish I was a flake. It sounds prettier than being a fragment. Flakes are like snow. Soothing, falling from the sky on the tip of his tongue that melt and disappear. Fragments are archeological findings of a scarred past we really should not remember.

I want to remember my scars. So I am a fragment.

-

I draw on my legs. When my skin dries out, I use my index finger as a pencil and draw what the clouds are trying to tell me. Sometimes it’s a dog, and sometimes it’s a bear and sometimes it is his face looking at me disapprovingly.

That is when I stop drawing.

-

At night, when the rain falls, I sit at the bay window and pretend to write stories whilst he pretends to sleep. “What are you writing?” he will ask in his asleep voice. “A funny story.” It is not. It is a pale, scary story, and it looks like my skin. “Were you dreaming?” I will ask him and he will always nod and say, “Yes, a good dream.” No, it is not. I have seen how his back tenses and sweats in the moonlight when he sleeps.

-

I worry when I read scientific facts, so he hides the newspapers from me when he is done. I always find them and spread them out on the table till every inch of it is covered. Today's newspaper said that the average human sheds eighteen kilograms of skin throughout their lifespan.

I am not sure about how I feel about the fragments dropping in trains and cars and planes and traveling to places I shall never go.

-

“Do you think you’ll ever go to Japan?”

“Doubt it. I shall never have the money.”

“I bet parts of you have already got there.”

“You and your fragments.”

“Me and my fragments. We’re both so uncomfortable.”

“My fragments and I. And it’s not you, or them that are uncomfortable.”

“What is it, then?”

“It's just this skin you are in.”
I wish there was a category for prosetry on the site. I wrote this and read it out at a poetry slam a long time ago.

A little secret: I had the last line of this tattooed to my skin soon after the poetry slam.

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SurrealNacre Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2014  Student General Artist
prosetry...why isn't that a thing yet? great writing as always!
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thredd Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2014  Student General Artist
this is beautiful as it stands.

it's as if you have made friends with your fragments and possibly even your skin. 
at least that is how this reads to me, personally and i should like to do do the same 
or have wished to do so
for 
a [very very] 
long time

a dramatic side effect has me say
since time before memory

however i must only reiterate the first line of my comment.

this sounds a bit stoic - i am full of joy on this : ]
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BeyondJen Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I can't exactly pinpoint what it is that I like about this so much. Maybe it's the storytelling and the pictures you paint. I don't know, but I definitely like it. :)
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maryjayne530 Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Another great one!
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SincerelyKrissy Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2013
This is great. It really resonates with me. 
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Rojozorra Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2013  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
I do like this a lot, but I find more and more I haven't found something of yours I dislike yet.
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PoeticDeathEyes Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer

it reminds me of fear

fear of self

relationships are foiled when people don't know themselves.

perhaps I got it wrong but the essence is sadness and that part cant be denied.

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februaryblue Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
There's a Native American concept where your soul becomes fragmented as a result of trauma, and your poem reminded me of it.  I think your line, "Fragments are archeological findings of a scarred past we really should not remember", illustrates this concept nicely.
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Concora Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2013   Writer
This piece has been featured in #The-Asterismos' weekly Showcase [here].

Please support your fellow featured deviants, and thank you for sharing your wonderful work with the group! :thanks: :heart:
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kaelamae Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2013  Student Writer
Beautiful. As always
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Sparia Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2013  Student General Artist
its heart aching...becoz of its beauty...i love how its intense. 
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Kay-March Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2013
Intense and beautiful. Wonderful really.
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! :hug:
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Kay-March Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2013
You're very welcome!Huggle!
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dreamsinstatic Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2013
Your fantastic work has been featured in Friday Night Features.
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
WOW! Thank you!! :D
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confidenceAlive Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I love this (:
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you do much!
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I am always so pleased to see a comment from you dearest! Thank you for taking the time to read this out loud! :heart:
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xlntwtch Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2013   Writer

How could I NOT read it aloud? I don't "do" tattoos, but have read a couple short pieces at slams before.

This one's ready good. :iconspreadmoreloveplz:

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mintybreeze Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
I had to google prosetry to check if it was a real word. (laughs) They really should create such a category, it fits your work perfectly. 
I really like this line fragments dropping in trains and cars and planes and traveling to places I shall never go. 
For me, that sounds rather romantic (though maybe unhygienic) , that you are able to leave behind fragments of yourself like a cookie trail if you will. Then perhaps these fragments can also lead you to new places where you can discover yourself. 

Lovely work as always:+fav:
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you, my dearest. :)

I do agree that in a way, its really beautiful that there will be pieces of you in places your eyes can never see. :)
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bananashroom Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2013  Student General Artist
This is just WOW.

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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! :)
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Dudet19 Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is amazing.Hello,Goodbye..my butterfly Clear Adoration 
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks so much! :)
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Dudet19 Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome :)
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MetalPorSiempre Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I always wondered dhow this kind of texts were called... "Prosetry", sounds nice, I wonder how it would translate into Spanish...
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Awww...thank you so much, my dear! :)
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Nuzma Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I love it, your language seems to be flowing over the page so freely! 
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much, dearest! :)
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Nuzma Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You're welcome! :)
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Blissful-Day-Dreamer Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2013  Student Writer
I don't think some people realise that prosetry is a thing haha ^^;
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
LOL, well, it is a very evasive thing to define! :P
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irrenderNarr42 Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
what did the audience say?
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
They were very kind about it. I got some cheers which were wonderful! :)
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irrenderNarr42 Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
^^
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HazyDreamerNeko Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2013
I shall end up faving every single piece you write.
But seriously this is wonderful!
Though i do prefer "fragments" to "flakes" really. ^^
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Awww, thank you!

LOL, I like flake because I'm a bit flakey! :P
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Shizui Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2013
Oh my God, that was beautiful! <3
You are very talented!

And also....I don't wanna sound like a noob, but could you explain prose and prosetry to me please? XD
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! 

Well Prosetry is literature primarily written in prose form with poetic language. Its supposed to be a bit surreal. :)
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Shizui Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2013
Ah! thanks for explaining that to me! :D
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dragonfuture Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
This is so beautiful.
Could I... recommend a book to you? I think you might like it a lot. The poetry sort of reminds me of it...
It's called The Perks of Being a Wallflower by Stephen Chbosky. (There's also a movie adaption, which is really good.)
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Wow! Now thats a compliment! I hear the book is amazing and I will definitely read it! :)
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dragonfuture Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
:D Well, thank you for reading it, I guess! It's one of my most favourite books of all time, and I can relate to both Charlie and Sam, somehow. :3
Please tell me what you thought of it when you've read/seen it! :D
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signalspells Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2013  Student Writer
YES
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:hug:
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