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You looked. I glanced. We met. I smiled. You smiled back. A sentence here. A metaphor there. A memory we both found beyond repair. I shared. You listened. You shared. I heard. You paused. And then I kissed you.

We're happy.

Fingers pressed skin. Then danced apart. I teased. You laughed. You joked. I grinned. Stairwells were dreamcatchers. Stars were destinies. Guitars became epiphanies. More words. More memories. More to admit. More to regret. You were damaged. I was broken.

We're happy.

You stopped smiling. I didn't laugh. Words began to go unspoken. Regrets emerged. Fingers didn't touch. Lips faltered. Stairwells were nightmare holders. Stars were dead light from the skies. Guitars became dust ridden.

We're happy.

Words became unspeakable. Memories were untrustworthy. Your eyes told lies. My hands betrayed me. We broke apart before we had a chance to be. I became distant. And were gone.

I'm happy.

Now repeat until you believe it.

I'm happy.
I'm happy.
I'm happy
It's 3 a.m. I'm still awake. I'm losing sleep. I'm losing myself.

I'm losing you.

So I write this tonight. I write it for everyone of us who has suffered. Every one of us who is broken. Every one of us who has a damaged soul. Every one of us whose brilliant scarlet became just another red.

This is for us, the broken ones.

And for the ones who broke us in two.
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VanePyroRocker Feb 22, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Amazing. :3
To know we are not the only one broken in the world is sometimes the only thing we can hang on to some days. Thank you for writing this.
coconatsu Aug 5, 2012  Student General Artist
Your words make my heart ache..... How can something so broken be so beautiful?
MusicalKate Aug 5, 2012  Student Photographer
This definitely caught my eye and I'm so glad I read this. I can relate to it so well, along with many others and you've described it in perfectly powerful words. Thank you for touching our hearts, it's meant so much. :heart:
skruffy123 Aug 4, 2012  Professional General Artist
stone strikes stone, fractures become fissures, our forms are crushed, lying in pieces we tell our selves we are whole.
I love this in all of it's dark glory. Allow me to insert a hopeful euphemism. We are not the broken ones. We are the healing ones. Eventually the pain will leave. Despite the horror of the present, there is hope for the next second, minute, hour, day, week, month, year... at one point... we will be well again.
A-Lovely-Anxiety Jul 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you.
magic6jewls Jul 17, 2012  Student Writer
I'm more saddened by the description than the artwork itself. You got me at "I'm losing you." I'm not sure why the entire piece left me untouched, but perhaps it's just because it's so similar to everything else I've seen (I've seen too much!). Either way, I'm touched by your writing.
ballerina-chick May 8, 2012
Thanks for writing such a great poem.... it was easy to relate to (as you can see)
and many people (like me) need something to relate to. :)

Im broken...
but the fourth paragraph wasnt an option for me.
He didnt give us a chance to fail. :(

I may be broken inside, but outside I am happy.
UntamedUnwanted May 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you for writing to me. I am sad to hear that you're not happy. I can only wish and pray for your happiness and offer an ear to listen. I hope you are doing better by the time I have responded to you.
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