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The trouble with the Boy was that he didn't have the heart of Shakespeare, the voice of Poe, nor the soul of Wordsworth, nor the knowledge of Rembrandt in his darkest days. He didn't have a trace of Michaelangelo's spirit nor the angst of Carvaggio and this on its own was enough to dissuade him from understanding that technique was far better than solidarity and possession far more ageless than youth.

He didn't have any of this knowledge because his father hadn't had the courage to tell him that he needed all the qualities of these great men, to win over the heart of a woman who had the dreams of Austen, the ideas of Da Vinci and the scent of a high priestess of Venetian origin.

The Girl was all those things and more, and her value, her estimate in the market of souls was higher than most. She was an angel amongst Gods, and He should never have let her go into the world thinking that it was Keats hearted. Because like all women who live their lives story shaped, she was soon broken by ridicule, humbled by ill experiences and riddled by judgement of the people who didn't understand.

It was odd then, that when the Boy told the Girl she deserved more, she shook her head till her long hair was a curtain around her face, hiding the tears that one cried only when they knew they were safe and would never have to cry again.

You see, she knew that the trouble with the Boy was that he didn't have the heart of Shakespeare, the voice of Poe, nor the soul of Wordsworth, nor the knowledge of Rembrandt in his darkest days. But what he did possess was the determination of Joyce mixed with the sheer undaunted, witty, spirit of Dickens.
For the Boy who thought he wasn't worth it and the Girl who believed in him.

From the Best Friend who watched you both grow up.

Congratulations on your wedding, you two literary fiends.

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My friends got married and I decided to write this for them as one of their wedding presents. :D
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Flocature Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2014  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
Flawless depiction of my thoughts about relationship with my boyfriend.
You definitely have THE TALENT.
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Amanita-Muscaria1 Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2014  Professional Photographer
This is unbelievably beautiful!  Heart 
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Montalto69 Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2013  Professional General Artist
New I am to the awesome wealth of writing here, not the least of which, the poetry of which yours is to me outstanding. Perhaps this old dawg may learn a thing or two here, thanks for the inspiring poem.
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Awstein Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2013
Wow. This is truly amazing. I really love the apparent simplicity of the words and the syntax you use, and how much they manage to convey precisely because they feel effortless and clear.
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much, my dear, for reading and commenting on this. :hug:
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Awstein Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2013
You're most welcome :) I don't follow many literature accounts on DA but I'll definitely follow yours (actually I'd gladly buy your book if you published one, just sayin' :p)!
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Nullibicity Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This stole my breath and then hurled it across the room.

I honestly was unsure of how to comment, as I wished to, but feared my words would not be enough to describe my love and admiration for this wonderful piece of literature. It was truly beautiful, and really earned my adoration within a few mere words, to shock me with the rest. I'm sure your friends absolutely loved this! I know I would, if one of my friends put such time, effort, and thought into a gift. You could really see how it was written from your heart, and I believe your love for them was showcased well within this piece!

Just a beautiful job. It frustrates me that I cannot think of anything more to say! I want to let my emotions show within my comment, to praise you as you deserve to be praised, and really share that I thought this was amazing. It touched me in ways only writing seems to, but something I sometimes find rare. It was gorgeous and stunning. Your description of "the Girl" was just... I cannot even think of a word for it! I am not a pure soul, or story shaped. I'm an average soul (perhaps downgraded more by myself in aspects), really. I found myself still being able to relate to this however, mostly because it reminded me of the purity of my youth and my admiration for people who can continue to live in such a beautiful way that writing cannot help but be inspired, and created from. You've created something relatable to all, if only because they've had a similar experience, or someone they hold dear is such a girl... and I found this incredible.

It really reminded me I have a long ways to go with my own writing. I must thank you, too, for strengthening my urge to see myself there. It is so very deeply appreciated, as I want to eventually be a writer I can be entirely accepting of. :hug:
Thank you, and outstanding job with this wonderful piece.
I will no doubt be looking at your other work when I find myself with adequate time! :heart:
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GothicSocks Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2012  Student General Artist
I can't describe the love I have for this :heart:
So beautiful.
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Lankantien Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
This is really beautiful, I hope that one day I'll have friend who will write something like this for me. :)
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Your work has been featured in my journal: [link] :heart:
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