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The trouble with the Boy was that he didn't have the heart of Shakespeare, the voice of Poe, nor the soul of Wordsworth, nor the knowledge of Rembrandt in his darkest days. He didn't have a trace of Michaelangelo's spirit nor the angst of Carvaggio and this on its own was enough to dissuade him from understanding that technique was far better than solidarity and possession far more ageless than youth.

He didn't have any of this knowledge because his father hadn't had the courage to tell him that he needed all the qualities of these great men, to win over the heart of a woman who had the dreams of Austen, the ideas of Da Vinci and the scent of a high priestess of Venetian origin.

The Girl was all those things and more, and her value, her estimate in the market of souls was higher than most. She was an angel amongst Gods, and He should never have let her go into the world thinking that it was Keats hearted. Because like all women who live their lives story shaped, she was soon broken by ridicule, humbled by ill experiences and riddled by judgement of the people who didn't understand.

It was odd then, that when the Boy told the Girl she deserved more, she shook her head till her long hair was a curtain around her face, hiding the tears that one cried only when they knew they were safe and would never have to cry again.

You see, she knew that the trouble with the Boy was that he didn't have the heart of Shakespeare, the voice of Poe, nor the soul of Wordsworth, nor the knowledge of Rembrandt in his darkest days. But what he did possess was the determination of Joyce mixed with the sheer undaunted, witty, spirit of Dickens.
For the Boy who thought he wasn't worth it and the Girl who believed in him.

From the Best Friend who watched you both grow up.

Congratulations on your wedding, you two literary fiends.

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My friends got married and I decided to write this for them as one of their wedding presents. :D
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Flocature Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2014  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
Flawless depiction of my thoughts about relationship with my boyfriend.
You definitely have THE TALENT.
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Amanita-Muscaria1 Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2014  Professional Photographer
This is unbelievably beautiful!  Heart 
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Montalto69 Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2013  Professional General Artist
New I am to the awesome wealth of writing here, not the least of which, the poetry of which yours is to me outstanding. Perhaps this old dawg may learn a thing or two here, thanks for the inspiring poem.
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Awstein Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2013
Wow. This is truly amazing. I really love the apparent simplicity of the words and the syntax you use, and how much they manage to convey precisely because they feel effortless and clear.
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much, my dear, for reading and commenting on this. :hug:
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Awstein Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2013
You're most welcome :) I don't follow many literature accounts on DA but I'll definitely follow yours (actually I'd gladly buy your book if you published one, just sayin' :p)!
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Nullibicity Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This stole my breath and then hurled it across the room.

I honestly was unsure of how to comment, as I wished to, but feared my words would not be enough to describe my love and admiration for this wonderful piece of literature. It was truly beautiful, and really earned my adoration within a few mere words, to shock me with the rest. I'm sure your friends absolutely loved this! I know I would, if one of my friends put such time, effort, and thought into a gift. You could really see how it was written from your heart, and I believe your love for them was showcased well within this piece!

Just a beautiful job. It frustrates me that I cannot think of anything more to say! I want to let my emotions show within my comment, to praise you as you deserve to be praised, and really share that I thought this was amazing. It touched me in ways only writing seems to, but something I sometimes find rare. It was gorgeous and stunning. Your description of "the Girl" was just... I cannot even think of a word for it! I am not a pure soul, or story shaped. I'm an average soul (perhaps downgraded more by myself in aspects), really. I found myself still being able to relate to this however, mostly because it reminded me of the purity of my youth and my admiration for people who can continue to live in such a beautiful way that writing cannot help but be inspired, and created from. You've created something relatable to all, if only because they've had a similar experience, or someone they hold dear is such a girl... and I found this incredible.

It really reminded me I have a long ways to go with my own writing. I must thank you, too, for strengthening my urge to see myself there. It is so very deeply appreciated, as I want to eventually be a writer I can be entirely accepting of. :hug:
Thank you, and outstanding job with this wonderful piece.
I will no doubt be looking at your other work when I find myself with adequate time! :heart:
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GothicSocks Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2012  Student General Artist
I can't describe the love I have for this :heart:
So beautiful.
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Lankantien Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
This is really beautiful, I hope that one day I'll have friend who will write something like this for me. :)
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Your work has been featured in my journal: [link] :heart:
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Dezaruthebeast Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I really loved this great job. Tell the newlyweds congratulations.
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Egoariana Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2012
I like this a lot. And Hemingway should not hate it. Congratulations to your friends for the wedding and to you for writing this :)
Still.... I don't think Hemingway would hate it... just saying...
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WyckedDreamsDesigns Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2012  Professional Artisan Crafter
omg this is amazing!!! Congrats to them also
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Mr-Black-Bird Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2012
This is awesome. I think it's a great wedding present, original and intimate.

PS: for the record, I hate Hemingway, lol.
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NotenSMSK Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Impressive work :) I love the contrast of different artists, many of whom all the literature works knows. The ending was what I was anxious about and it came out brilliantly!

The only thing I am FINE with but felt odd is that the father Didn't tell him that he NEEDED all those qualities to get the girl? that came a bit... unsuspecting perhaps :) Otherwise a great work like always!
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theolivethief14 Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
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This is beautiful.
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signalspells Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2012  Student Writer
Hemingway was a hipster and sure he sang in Italian to his wife, but he'd been married three times prior,they slept in separate beds and he shot himself in the head. So screw him and his post war cynicism. This is beautiful!
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tiraluv Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2012
This is absolutely precious.
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much!! :hug:
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astrangeallure Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
That's an awesome present....absolutely love it. :) Inspiring. :)
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much. :)
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kovujackson Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
omg this is beautiful! and i know everyone has said that before. but you my dear, are a literary fiend.
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Awww!! I do hope to be a literary fiend. I don't read as much as I used to. :(
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pbca04 Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2012
Awesome! You truely have a way with words. Awesome!
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much!! :hug: :heart:
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Maerd7733SCAIP Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This is so sweet :heart: Congratulate your friends for me, please :D this is an extremely thoughtful gift. I'm positive they loved it :D I'd love to receive something like this on my wedding day. However I am weird and crazy and I don't think there's a guy on earth brave enough to marry me ^^; Oh well!

Back on topic: Beautifully written :D
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much, my darling. And I think there should be at least a million guys fighting over someone as wonderful as you.
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Maerd7733SCAIP Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
No problem :D :blush: And that's very sweet of you to say :hug:
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PuzzledHeartBox Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2012
:faint: I'm truly amazed by the sheer brilliance of this work.
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:glomp: Thank you!! :)
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PuzzledHeartBox Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2012
You're welcome.
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cLaIrEbY Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2012
You are a stunning wordsmith and I hope I keep getting to read beautiful things from you. This is lovely and I hope your friends loved their present :)
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you for those gorgeous, kind words. :)
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sydnerella Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2012   Writer
I love this piece, very well written and original. :)
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ElfFriend1 Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2012  Professional Artist
This is beautiful... your friends are very fortunate, as, if this inspiration is any judge, are you. :)
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ninangame Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2012  Student General Artist
This is freaking amazing. Thank you for being so inspirational! :D
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tr1st3r Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is so beautiful and such a sweet wedding present!
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LutscherDame Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
Great writing! beautiful.
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Mrs-Freestar-Bul Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
What a beautiful present :love: Absolutely beautiful.
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Lacriyme Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
What a beautiful gift! :)
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haggard85 Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2012
First of all, pass my congratulations and well wishes on to your friends. It's always wonderful when you can find the one that you want to spend your life to make them happy.

Now, I cannot remember the last time that I read something that made my heart ache so in longing. It seemed that every memory and desire in my heart and soul flashed through me with renewed ardor as the words passed before my eyes. Beautiful cannot describe this piece, and once more you have done that which has seemed to become a pattern for you. You have left me awestruck.
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Phandagart Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2012
I feel embarrassed saying this but I have to admit that I am too stupid to understand this composition. :,( It's very poetic but I can't see behind the words. I don't even know who Wordsworth is. :B
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Crystal-Magic13 Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
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Archonzero Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2012
Beautiful an heartful touching.
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Bittney Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
So sweet and touching, your friends are lucky to have you. Wedding gift bar has now been raised ^^ lol
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ENT77 Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2012
Hemingway might hate it, but I love it!

Really cute!
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blingsparks101 Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This is a singular wedding present, and hey there is never enough singularity!
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Pell-MellxX Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2012  Student General Artist
This is a beautiful wedding present. The imagery here is so unique. <3 They are lucky to have you as a friend!
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Phantasm1 Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Wow they sound neat I hope they enjoyed the present and are happy together :). Anyways I love all the literary references in this :)
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Masquerader13 Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2012
This is a fantastic gift, your words are truly beautiful.
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