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"Hey! Are you all right?"

"Sure, why wouldn't I be?"

"Um...because you just fell from the roof of the hou-"

"See, that's where you're wrong. I didn't fall. The floor challenged me and I accepted."

"And how did that go for you?"

"The floor won. But only because it had the advantage."

"Of being non sentient and vast in size, along with the fact that there is a freaking storm out!!"

"Nope. I just attacked from the wrong position."

"Backwards?"

"I overestimated my skills."

"I'll say. You're bleeding!"

"Only a little. Ask me again."

"What?"

"If I'm fine."

"Are you?"

"Nope."

"Is it because you're bleeding?"

"You're supposed to ask 'Why'."

"God, you're so bloody difficult!"

"But cute. Just ask."

"Oh for-Why?"

"Because this world we live in, it gives us these dreams, you see. These great big beautiful colourful galaxies in our heads of ideas, thoughts and empathetic conclusions to our fellow humans. Our brain tells us, go on, be curious, make those mistakes. Make big, small, tiny, angry, happy, playful, experimental, challenging, beautiful mistakes and the world will reward you with answers, knowledge, and all the beauty it has to offer. But..."

"But what?"

"No one really prepares us for the heartbreak it all brings with it. No one ever tells us that the world will greedily take the good in us, our dreams, and spit us out, soulless, but still alive...and then it blames us for watching all our beautiful dreams die."

"..."

"What? Say something?"

"Why were you out on the roof today."

"I was looking up at the sky."

"During a storm?"

"I just like knowing it is not just me. I just like knowing that even the skies scream, with the weight of all our lost, forgotten, broken little dreams..."
It has been a long time since I wrote a conversational piece. And then I had an epiphany on the way down between a rooftop and the ground. I except if this was a conversation in real life, it would end with "I think you need medical attention now." which is decidedly less romantic, and doesn't make the best of stories. Sentences have been made prettier with artistic license alone. ;)

I'm fine, by the way. :P
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Germanyfan123321 Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2015
Wow it's nothing like I've ever seen before…it really gets the gears in my brain working…
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ThexSilverxWolf Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2015
Man this one makes you think.
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ME-v2 Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2015  Student Digital Artist
I  like it. Very dramatic, thought-provoking.
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circumsolem Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
beautiful piece, I really enjoyed it!! :)
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MrMacAila Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This is aweeesomee!
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IcyKixz260 Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2014  Hobbyist Artist
Love it.Heart Love
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Cezille07 Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Goosebumps xD Lovely piece :dummy:
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AerialGeoDuck75 Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2014  Hobbyist
A beautifully written piece, you have a wonderful way with words.
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ParallelCat Featured By Owner May 30, 2014
This is wonderful! I laughed my way through the first few lines and was in awe at the last few. You're a great writer.
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haphazardmelody Featured By Owner May 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
The entire thing is brilliant, but I would have added this to my favorites for the last line alone.

Would you mind terribly if I write a poem based off that last line? I would absolutely link your piece to mine, drop you a comment, all that good stuff. :)
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primalfuryan Featured By Owner May 14, 2014  Professional General Artist
:iconaparazita-r::iconsquirrelflight-77:Your artwork has been graciously featured in Titans Genuine Literature feature ,stay wonderful!Hug:iconsquirrelflight-77::iconaparazita-r:
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sun-lily Featured By Owner May 7, 2014  Hobbyist
Also I suggested your piece as for a dd but he said that it was miscatgerozied as prose. 
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner May 8, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Whoops! Thanks for letting me know (I'll fix that now)! Funnily enough a while ago, someone told me that this style was not prose, it was poetry because of how lyrical it was. :P

Oh well, back to the drawing board! :P
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sun-lily Featured By Owner May 6, 2014  Hobbyist
I like the back and forth banter between the speakers. This style of poetry grabbed my attention and kept me hooked with the sarcastic tone. This makes you think in a different way just great!
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Gale-OneOfMany Featured By Owner May 4, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
You, are a brilliant person. Wonderful.
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PhoenixEverAfter Featured By Owner May 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This is one of the most beautiful things I've read in a long time!
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Xenna93 Featured By Owner May 3, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
this is so beautiful, makes me think of the world a little different than I did. :heart:
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner May 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks so much! :)
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Xenna93 Featured By Owner May 4, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
:hug:
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bikipop Featured By Owner May 3, 2014
beautiful piece
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner May 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :)
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Mireilles-epitaph Featured By Owner May 3, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
This is a beautiful piece of writing. Heart  I love it!

And by the way, you're taking the words right out of my mouth Sweating a little... .
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner May 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much, my dear! :heart:
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Mireilles-epitaph Featured By Owner May 6, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome Hug 
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Wholock-lover Featured By Owner May 2, 2014  Student Artist
I love this It is so moving and true
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner May 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks so much! :)
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Wholock-lover Featured By Owner May 6, 2014  Student Artist
Your very welcome
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Rainbowflower333 Featured By Owner May 2, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh my God this is awesome!
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner May 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :)
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yolokitty246 Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2014  Student Artisan Crafter
lol XD
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner May 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:lol:
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yolokitty246 Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2014  Student Artisan Crafter
the bigining though
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maryjayne530 Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I like this!
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner May 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks so much! :heart:
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brahlama Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
good sense of the dialog : )
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner May 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! :)
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Naru-17 Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow i don't think words can desride whats going through my head right now, but i think to state it simply would be, that it is amazing.
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner May 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Aww! Thank you! :)
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Naru-17 Featured By Owner May 5, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
your welcome
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conz680 Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2014
That ending was beautiful....
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner May 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! :)
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Crystal-Magic13 Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:glomp: You're writing is always so simply shattering.
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner May 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much, my dear, as always. :)
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Crystal-Magic13 Featured By Owner May 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You don't need to thank me. Your writing is enough.
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deli73123 Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2014  Student General Artist
Amazing.

I'm glad you're alright, though.
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner May 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks so much! :)
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deli73123 Featured By Owner May 4, 2014  Student General Artist
^^
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LoveDoc2 Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Oh, my God, this is beautiful! :iconclapplz:
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner May 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :)
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LoveDoc2 Featured By Owner May 4, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
You're welcome! :la:
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