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I snatch my breath after we kiss
because I want to feel you

contract

in my wheezing, useless lungs
not just a craving
but

a desperate need

within


in the physical urge
to breathe you in,

and


make your mystical secrets
a part of my body.
"write poetry" she said after my last asthma attack so I did. Breathlessly.


I actually wrote this one after an asthma attack. Tried to format it to my breathing pattern whilst I was having it...but capturing that kind of frustration is impossible, honestly. :P
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Blackfireheart111 Featured By Owner May 7, 2014
Wow. Incredible.
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silversongwriter Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2013
I might have asthma I don't know, I used to use and inhaler. However, I still run and do sports anyway.
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MorningMelon Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2013  Hobbyist
I guess everyone is metaphorically asthmatic when falling in love, struggling to get something we yearn for. Real nice way to convey that idea.
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Captive-Hearts Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2013  Student General Artist
I totally felt the kind of panting pattern to that. Amazing, I've never seen anything like it. I hope one day I'll be able to write on the same level as you!
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ExpressKeeluh Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I have asthma myself and this was a beautiful poem. It felt real. :heart:
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sarcastic-Assassin Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2013   Photographer
I didn't notice frustration while I read, I noticed a -need- one that is unconcious in its urgency. I can't say I've ever experienced an asthma attack, and I'm not sure if it felt like one while I read this, but I definitely felt something unsure. Maybe like you worked too hard to portray what comes so natural?
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SimbaCUB92 Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2013
I have asthma too and this poem was really amazing.
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much for the compliment. :)
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GloryAngel Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2013
Asthma is a pain... I have exercise-induced asthma so it doesn't happen all that often but it sucks when i does.
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
It really is. Especially when you wake up in the middle of the night bleeding.
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