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His hands have a habit of finding my hip bones,
trailing his river like fingers along my stone smooth skin,
his lips do not move, his mouth tells me stories.

Mine spend their time
tracing the length and breadth
of his back in kisses*


We travel through lands that never existed
before we touched them
At temperatures far exceeding in Fahrenheit

If only we could understand
how lust and geography
make such divinely sinful bedmates.



____________________
* One hundred and sixteen
Want to know something funny?

I hated geography in school.



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BadHabitS2 Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2013
wow .. just wow .. just wow.
i write too .. ima take your opinion on somethin' in the nearest chance. u.u
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izzy3301 Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2013
His hands have a habit of finding my hip bones, 
trailing his river like fingers along my stone smooth skin, 
his lips do not move, his mouth tells me stories.


LOVE THIS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Chapel-Horde Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
The imagery has found success as a poem.
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morbidthrall Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2012
Such divine beauty renewing.
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Lumenovus Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I might have liked it, if that were the type of geography we learned. What a wonderful, sensual poem. Creating your own lands... I feel a resonance with that idea. I'm happy for you, that you have had experiences to inspire something like this.
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NotenSMSK Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Hmm... short and simple. I am glad actually that it is not well... erotic ^^;. Having said that I like it since very such poem gives the impression or psychology of the author and what he/she percieves. You took a different approach that gave a different perspective over what you consider love or perhaps how YOU percieve it. The Italic portion worked well and I am genuinly surprised how you managed to pull 116... actually it explains the intensity of love... in my opinion :hmm:

The last stanza also concluded the whole work rather well... especially as you discussed geography which you hated at school. Good work :squee:
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AMPEugenie Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2012
very interesting
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forestmeetwildfire Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
the asterisk/footnote is definitely something i haven't seen in a poem before (:
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NianLauri Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2012
Seductive and beautifull in the same time. Realy love it.
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crystelclear1104 Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Such beauty and grace in a seductive poem. Love it!
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burning-girl Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2012
Not bad. Not bad.
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HarukaMoon Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2012  Student Writer
Such beauty in metaphor.
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Krusnik03 Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Amazing. :) Very great work.
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Rojozorra Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2012  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
But geography of the body is much more entertaining than that of the Earth.
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haggard85 Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2012
Wondrous is the way you describe the way lovers explore each other. Reading this it was almost as if that physical music could be heard. You can feel that buoyant, natural high reached when in the ecstasy of the others touch. I especially love the last stanza, and I'm telling you now that I'm going to re-use the "divinely sinful bedmates". Absolutely love that wording. But I have to ask.....what is one hundred and sixteen?
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breezybrutality Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I love the asterisk, it surprised me!
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EmeraldsOfSugar Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
amazing~!!
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Unhinged-Arrogance Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2012  Student General Artist
This amazing. Wish I could write poetry with such grace and devotion to the words.
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Sigma-Echo-Seven Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2012  Student Writer
Each line was perfect in length, and the whole thing flowed smoothly. Well done!
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jmart664 Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Very well done, such beauty... sensual.
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jme-lee Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
it's like the internet gods sent me here. this poem. this poem is so much of how i feel right now.
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yamashta Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
breadth? lol
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introvertebrate Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
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i was wondering the same thing, too d:
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superioritycomplex14 Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2012
Excellent poem ^_^
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Avield Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
mmmmm It was good until you acutally said "lust"
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EmmaRivera Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2012
wow this is really wow.
I love this poetry is really beautiful
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Kailani-e Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
^_^ Breath taking. Your poems are felt with such raw beautiful emotion! >_< Happiness to both of you!
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sherlockholmes34 Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2012
Superb. Welcome to upcoming writers.
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GodOfCoffee Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
your text never gets boring :3
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Hardvaro Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2012
Hawt.
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starlightshinebright Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2012
how erotic ! <3
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LightOverpowers58 Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2012  Student Writer
"If only we could understand/how lust and geography/make such divinely sinful bedmates," these lines are awesome....a rather magnificent ending to an amazing piece....I can't say I enjoyed geography either, too many facts...
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charlycharly123 Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
wow i love this!!!!
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ScOpOpHoBiA-wHoRe Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Beautiful.
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astrangeallure Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I love the footnote. :D You counted...aloud? Have you thought about extending the title to Lust and Geography...that really stood out to me in the poem...I felt this in my fingertips...wanted to follow the movement as I read...so, the sensation comes through very strongly. Excellent. :)
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Renovative Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
speaking of take me on a journey......needless to say I love it!!!!
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The-Anariarch Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2012
Prepare to Broadside!

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Lovely Lust, most elegant, many thanks for the inspiration.
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gph-artist Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2012  Professional Traditional Artist
This is a lovely poem; lovely sentiment beautifully conveyed.

Inspires me to illustrate a scene (tastefully, of course) surrounding this. Would you mind?
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ReaperRose Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
How are you so awesome at this? :D
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LadyAnnatar Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2012
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Thelostsoulofpop Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I think your poems are excellent!
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much for saying that!! :hug:
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