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You take mouthfuls of me
Huge, selfish as they are
Leaving morsels of me behind
Teeth my words and chew up my heart
Bite through my spine with shark like jaws
I am used, you explain, damaged,

Dirty.

Dirty for existing.
Dirty for loving you.

I ask you why you like to hurt me.

"I love you most when you ache on the inside."

I have never hated myself more.
Hold it in a little bit longer...

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Crystal-Magic13 Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer

You know, I didn't even recognize this as your art,

but I was still drawn to it. Than I recognized your

icon, and I think 'Well duh. Who else could write

like that?' :hug: You're one of the best writers I

can relate to.

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izzy3301 Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2013
LOVE IT
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Lawlessness45 Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Holy crap. "I love you most when you ache on the inside." That line struck me to my core. 
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SpiritDuchess Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2013
Such exquisite conciseness.
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angelichope Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2013
Boy can I ever relate!!!!:D
It's a wonderful poem!!:heart:
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Painapurru Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2013
Impeccable. I am, yet again, stunned by you, my dear. I hope you're doing alright and that you yourself never lose sight of your worth since, I dare say, you're worth quite a lot.
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks so much, my dear. :hug:
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DarkroomDilation Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2013   Photographer
f***ed up. love it.
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:iconuntamedunwanted:
UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:hug:
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confidenceAlive Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
As always, you have such a talent in expressing such...pain..what only one once- broken heart can share to another (but aren't we all a little broken-hearted, and chipped 'round the edges?) I can almost relate. Almost. And perhaps it's that I don't want to admit how true it feels, because if it were true, it would be terrible. But "I have never hated myself more." and I can't decide if I'm the user, or the used.
Hmm... Don't mind my rambling :P Suffice it to say, I think this poem is lovely, in a terrible sort of way.
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Your words are lovely and descriptive. Thank you for being kind to me. :)
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confidenceAlive Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Ah, but of course (:
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w-anderlust Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2013  Student Writer
Very interesting, darker. I personally like it.

How are you doing, sweetheart? It's been a while since we've talked.
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:iconuntamedunwanted:
UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm all right. Doing much better now. How are you?? :)
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w-anderlust Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2013  Student Writer
That's how :) I'm doing pretty well, thanks for asking :)
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Rojozorra Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2013  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
<3 all the love in the world for a smile beautiful.
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you my darling. :hug:
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Rojozorra Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2013  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
You are very welcome beautiful. :smooch:
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haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I love that you've used a lot of phrases that I feel tend to be cliche, but you've turned them into something unique and new. Your phrasing, as always, is impeccable.

All that being said, I hope you are okay. :hug:
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much. I am fine...just need to get rid of all this pent up grief and sadness which will take years to go away. :(
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dragonfuture Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
I want to hug you.
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:hug:
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dragonfuture Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
:blush:
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Blissful-Day-Dreamer Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2013  Student Writer
Dear heart, are you okay...?

It's beautifully heart-wrenching.
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I am...I just need to get rid of all this pent up emotion. :( Thank you for being there for me.
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Blissful-Day-Dreamer Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013  Student Writer
I know the feeling... I hope you can always find the words to vent,
it's a dreadful thing when you can't :)
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MyPoeticReality Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2013   Writer
You have left me in awe
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:hug:
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IntraSect Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2013
Idle hands shred corners kissed
by half-moon coffee stains born
of opportunities missed.

Formed amiss by greasy lips,
defiled smiles slather surface
with slithering dirt and filth.

Final strides wipe what they find
before abandon of rot
mirrors decay cast aside.

***

Walking sins call you napkin --
a place their wretch gets wrapped in.
They mask truth by lies within.

Stains aside, you're cheque from birth.
Signed by God, He wrote your worth:
"Treasure of the Universe".

The thoughts are always the same,
the feelings always remain,
but your value never changed.

***

(In the dream, they cannot see.)
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:)
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Annie--chan Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I love the metaphor used in this. Very powerful.
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:hug: Thank you, my dear! :)
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Annie--chan Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
No problem :)
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xEternalSorrow Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2013
Beautiful as always, dear. Hope you're still holding up. Love you.
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:hug: Thank you, my dearest. :hug:
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nightshade-keyblade Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This spoke to me on a mental level. I'm sure there are thousands of women who are nodding when they read this
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!! :) 
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nightshade-keyblade Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
My pleasure :aww:
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littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2013  Student Writer
These lines are excellent.
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :)
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chancerox Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
"I love you most when you ache on the inside."

--
can't explain how powerful those words are. i honestly relate to this so, so much more than i would like, and it's absolutely fabulous how you can relay pain into such perfect words. so many people come into your life to hurt you. :/
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you for being there for me. :hug:
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mintybreeze Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Very gripping. Great work as always! The way you transform words...wondrous.
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much, my dear. :)
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coruskating Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2013
Though I despise most verse that's 'free',
For most of it ain't worth the scree
Which clings to real poets' boots...
This masochism for the astutes
Would spell out lack of self appraise
And sick attachment to HIS haze...
Addiction best bestowed on sheep,
Not shark-like toothed and selfish creep,
Not on insulting selfish mind,
Which tasty morsels leaves behind...
Don't hate yourself emotions' child,
Let go of tether driving wild
And fasten cords which freedom bind
To gentler creatures, more refined.
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:) :hug: This is beautiful. :)
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XomegaXX Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I agree.
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its-a-yetti Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I spent a year of my life on a man who treated me like this. Worst mistake.
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:iconuntamedunwanted:
UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I spent two. It's horrible. They hurt you because they enjoy pain. :(
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If-Cloud-Was-A-Girl Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Huge impact, vivid images. Well written
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