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The rain boy had sworn that he would never again smile. His eyes always soaked the oceans with tears from his past and his heart was always dark and locked to anyone who could try and help him. His world had become so bleak and dark, that he stood in rooms of people that were a blur past him and a guitar that just no longer played.

So when the sunshine girl met the rain boy, for a second, the world stood still.  In that tiny little balcony, where there was only space for two, the sunshine girl asked the rain boy, "When was the last time you smiled?"

The rain boy was startled for a second at someone talking to him, but he answered anyway, "I think…it was ten years ago."

"Is that because someone broke your heart?"

"It is because more than one person broke my heart."

"Oh." She paused for a moment, but looked up again, her eyes dancing like star like diamonds "Well, just because someone broke your heart, it doesn't mean that they should become the hero of your story."

"I've never been the hero in my story. I barely even have a story."

"We all have stories."

"Well I don't. Maybe I used to. But I don't anymore."

"You do. You've just misplaced it."

He finally looked up at her, a puzzled look on his face. "How can you say that?"

She smiled. "Because somewhere out there, there is someone whose life has been changed, just by meeting you."

He snorted, "You can't possibly know that."

"I do. Because each and every one of us has changed someone's life. Even the smallest, tiniest, most broken ones of us all."

"How?"

She took his hand, gently. "By being alive. Every single fibre inside of you tingles, breathes and turns over like a child in a cradle in a fitful sleep...you may not enjoy it every single day... you may hate it...but by the gods, you are alive!"

And do you know, despite his promise…for the first time in ten years, the rain boy actually smiled.
100 Themes: Never Again

To fate and second chances...and for the blessing of being alive. I promise to never let the smile fade from your lips.
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patie9 Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2013  Student Digital Artist
I just reread this story a year and a half after the first time I read it, and it still kicked me in the gut like it did the very first time. This story leaves a wonderful taste in my mouth, and has again, after more than a year, given me a new outlook on life. 
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AngieTheCamel Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2013
:) Beautiful
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Idontknowwhoyouknow Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow, inspirative writing!
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skruffy123 Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2012  Professional General Artist
and along came the sunshine girl, with the power to breath life into smoldering flame. i love it. the intimacy of two people talking so directly about them selves
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tiraluv Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2012
This is wonderful. You've inspired me to experiment with the dialogue thing. I like how so much of the details are left up to the reader to imagine, but just enough so that it doesn't feel like it.
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After--Forever Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Charming piece :aww: You're definitely my favourite writer :iconflyingheartsplz:
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Sana-girl Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
This is so sweet.

"You do. You've just misplaced it". That line is so amazing! It is so beautiful adn I dont know why, but I love it.
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haggard85 Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2011
And in such auspicious moments, in ush things that we can never predict, love and life explode forth...and to find such a moment and a person, is to find the most precious of treasures, without concept or measure. Beautiful as always.
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DarkBlackWolf1625 Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2011
It's lovely, the ending made me smile :)
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xxxhitsuzen Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2011
There's something very quaint and lovely about these words. I admire your writing.
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dancingkat33 Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2011
gorgeous!
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :)
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Texeo Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
"I promise to never let the smile fade from your lips." I think that is the most beautiful promise I've ever heard <3
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much for the lovely words. :)
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Texeo Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I speak the truth :3
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Ariipa Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2011
I just love your stile!! Its a pleasure to read anything you right, more than once, i'd like to have a book with your little stories, to keep it in my backpack. :hug:
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Awwww, I am so flattered. You make me smile by just saying that. :glomp:
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Setsuka510 Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
It's beautiful. Your work just shows so much hope. So thank you.
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much as always. I'm so glad you liked it. :hug:
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Setsuka510 Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm so glad I read it :huggle: It's really beautiful!
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starshinexx Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
this really made me smile. You bring out the child in me ^^- <3
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :)
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starshinexx Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
welcome (:
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M3rcaptan Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2011  Student Traditional Artist
Wow... you are always good...
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. :hug:
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Maerd7733SCAIP Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Yay for happy endings! :meow: It's such a sweet story that nearly everyone in the world could relate to. You have such a universal style-it doesn't matter whether the person has experienced what you are writing about, they can still relate to it somehow.

Wonderful job! :heart:
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you for saying such wonderful things to me. I am always so moved by your words. :)
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Maerd7733SCAIP Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Aww thankies! :hug: I love your writing; you've got a beautiful vocabulary and...well, I really can't describe it because I fail like that ^^;
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catty2990 Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
sooooooo truuuueeee iiiii lllllooooveeee iiittt!!!!!! :la:
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much!! :hug:
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Painapurru Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2011
A very relateable message, I loved reading this. I went through cycles of a sort, jumping back and forth between being the Rain and the Sunshine. In the end I had a similar realization to the one explained by the Sunshine Girl: that we may not always like it but we do matter and we do affect someone out there in the world. You put this very well, I'm glad you wrote it!
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. I do believe that we all have a part to play in this world, and most importantly, in someone else's life. :) We are all significant somehow. :)
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Crystal-Magic13 Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Yes, I am double commenting. That is just how amazing it is.
The rain boy could be me, a long time ago. But maybe the
sunshine girl could be me now. Or could be me someday,
I'm not really sure. You brightened my day. I thank you.
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much for commenting on this again. Thank you for letting this into your life. :glomp: And most of all, thank you from going from being the rain boy to the sunshine girl. :)
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Crystal-Magic13 Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
^^ My writing frees me, and it chains me to the ground.
I no longer blow in the wind, but I can't fly anymore
either. It depends on the day and the sky, I'll never
really be either, I care too much and not enough. :hug:
The piece made me a smile, so thank you for that.
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Crystal-Magic13 Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I love this. There is a music to it, and a magic.
Well captured :hug: <3 :glomp: ^^
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Awww!!! Thank you for even saying that!! :hug:
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Crystal-Magic13 Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I really mean it!
I wish there was
more I could do to
this than faving
and collecting,
because I would.
Do you want a few points?
A Llama? This art deserves them.
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xXxFallenDreamerxXx Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2011
This made me cry. About three years ago, some things happened in my life that made me depressed. Any smile I had was fake. Just a little over a year ago, I thought I would never have a real smile again, and then I met someone who actually made me really smile. Sadly I had to move away, but we still keep in touch.
Thank you for writing this, it's absolutely wonderful.
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
:hug: I'm sorry to hear things didn't go well for you in the past. You are in my thoughts. I hope all will go well in the future. :glomp:
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xXxFallenDreamerxXx Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2011
Thank you so much. :hug: So far things are looking brighter, but I'm still in reality, so I can never be too sure about anything. :)
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sourismini Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2011
Pretty. And nicely wrote, it fits your style. Dark, yet luminous.
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! :heart:
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Krusnik03 Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Lovely piece. ^^ I like this one. It reminds me of something I wrote. XD
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :hug: Is your piece up on DA? I'd love to read it! :)
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Krusnik03 Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome. ^^ Yes, it is up, thank you. :D Yours reminded me of it because I always referred to the characters as the Lost Boy and the Shutter Girl. And yours were the Rain Boy and the Sunshine Girl. X)
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Leopardnight Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2011
I love how your stories give off good inspiration and amazing messages to the world. It's sometimes hard for some people to write messages like this, trust me my stories are never this good and never have these heart-filled meanings (but some of them I am proud of), yet even if they seem hard the talent and heart you spill into each word echoes around my ears even if I've never even heard your voice. The message makes my heart sing and my mind wonder about which ones I need to understand better.
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. Sometimes life is so hard to deal with, that I need to sit down and write something that will remind me that there is good in this world. Thank you for telling me that you can see my heart in my words. I really, truly appreciate that. :)
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Leopardnight Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2011
You're welcome, and I'm glad you appreciate it :D
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Waldo-Butters Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Madam, you just get better and better. Great job.
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