"Oh for the love of- All right. All right. You win. What is it?"
"What did you think the first time you met me?"
"That's not a problem, that's a question."
"How am I supposed to answer it exactly?"
"I don't know if your mother explained this to you, but all you have to do is open your mouth and words-"
"Shut it, smart ass."
"Then answer the question."
"I thought you were beautiful."
"See, now that's impossible."
"And why is that?"
"Because the first time you met me, it was online."
"It wasn't your face I was calling beautiful. It was your anonymity in your words."
"What does that mean?"
"It means that in the vast abyss of the seas that form a web of people, you were the one who sat alone in a life broken enough, damaged enough to start sculpting words from air. You threw it into the ocean, a question in a bottle and that question found me. It made me think about things I had forgotten long ago."
"You give me too much credit."
"And you don't give yourself enough."
"What what was the question?"
"Why is it that all things that are so beautiful are always so lonely?"
"Did you ever find the answer?"
"Won't you tell me?"
"What is beautiful is meant to be lonely, or else it loses what is truly poignant in its soul."
People meet in the strangest ways. My cousin was just telling my year old baby niece that she and her husband met the first time on facebook. It was such an interesting little story, I was somehow inspired by it.
I like the format on this one. Every response being double-spaced helps convey the sense of an instant message conversation. I'm curious, was this at all based on an actual exchange? Whether it was or not, I still find it very... interesting.
There's visibly two different patterns of speech here, helping to convey the sense of a conversation between two people. The only place I would say that it blurs is where the one asks, "What does that mean?" The lengthy, well-written response seems like something the one who asked the question (you?) would say. Not to say the responder couldn't also be a writer, it's just slightly unexpected.
Anyway, I really like how you get into the meaning of "beauty" here: the one person saying the other was beautiful, despite not seeing them when they first met... and especially the question at the bottom. It really reverberates with me, not that I would think of myself as "beautiful," but... I don't know, maybe some of my friends would say such nice things about me. I just think about it because of the line which says that beautiful things are always lonely. I would definitely describe myself as "lonely," but never "beautiful." But your words, "What is beautiful is meant to be lonely, or else it loses what is truly poignant in its soul" just makes me wonder...
I really like this piece. Thank you for sharing it with us.
I need to say you that I'm going to post this short story in some one I know facebook profile. I hope she can see what I see. It will be a link, she will be coming here so I think it should be ok, right? Thanks a lot beforehand.
To be fair, this is pretty much how I feel about you right now; like you've already met me, maybe a thousand of me's.
I wish I had the power to show your writing to many others. This is the kind of stuff that should be read in school. My ONLY issue is that it became kind-of easy to lose track of who was talking; I wish there was some way to differentiate between speakers - and that's hardly your fault.
I am so glad there are still people who understand what a powerful well of creativity and beauty pain can be.
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