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"I have a problem."

"You always were a worrier."

"Don't you want to know what it is?"

"Not if it's going to worry me as well."

"That's precisely why you should know it."

"I really think I'll pass."

"But-"

"No."

"…"

"Thank you."

"But…this time it's a really big deal."

"Oh for the love of- All right. All right. You win. What is it?"

"What did you think the first time you met me?"

"That's not a problem, that's a question."

"I know."

"How am I supposed to answer it exactly?"

"I don't know if your mother explained this to you, but all you have to do is open your mouth and words-"

"Shut it, smart ass."

"Then answer the question."

"I thought you were beautiful."

"See, now that's impossible."

"And why is that?"

"Because the first time you met me, it was online."

"It wasn't your face I was calling beautiful. It was your anonymity in your words."

"What does that mean?"

"It means that in the vast abyss of the seas that form a web of people, you were the one who sat alone in a life broken enough, damaged enough to start sculpting words from air. You threw it into the ocean, a question in a bottle and that question found me. It made me think about things I had forgotten long ago."

"You give me too much credit."

"And you don't give yourself enough."

"What…what was the question?"

"Why is it that all things that are so beautiful…are always so lonely?"

"Did…you ever find the answer?"

"I did."

"Won't you tell me?"

"What is beautiful is meant to be lonely, or else it loses what is truly poignant in its soul."
100 Themes: Online

People meet in the strangest ways. My cousin was just telling my year old baby niece that she and her husband met the first time on facebook. It was such an interesting little story, I was somehow inspired by it. :)
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AnimalAmelia16 Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
That is so lovely. I think I might cry again. :) thanks
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marine7000 Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2013
You are amazing...
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Devlin26 Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013
Totally agree with you. I've been out of this so long because of work and so many stupid things, but here I come again and feel embraced by your words and start aiming so much better on myself.
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divafica Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
I love your writing so much, I get exited when I see you've written something new. :eager:
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skruffy123 Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2012  Professional General Artist
hmhmhm i thoroughly enjoy what you write. i love the blunt funny dialogue that still has a very pertinent and thoughtful topic
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tiraluv Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2012
"...you were the one who sat alone in a life broken enough, damaged enough to start sculpting words from air." Me gusta mas. :) Your writing is amazing.
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Kazuto-kun Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2012
I like the format on this one. Every response being double-spaced helps convey the sense of an instant message conversation. I'm curious, was this at all based on an actual exchange? Whether it was or not, I still find it very... interesting.

There's visibly two different patterns of speech here, helping to convey the sense of a conversation between two people. The only place I would say that it blurs is where the one asks, "What does that mean?" The lengthy, well-written response seems like something the one who asked the question (you?) would say. Not to say the responder couldn't also be a writer, it's just slightly unexpected.

Anyway, I really like how you get into the meaning of "beauty" here: the one person saying the other was beautiful, despite not seeing them when they first met... and especially the question at the bottom. It really reverberates with me, not that I would think of myself as "beautiful," but... I don't know, maybe some of my friends would say such nice things about me. I just think about it because of the line which says that beautiful things are always lonely. I would definitely describe myself as "lonely," but never "beautiful." But your words, "What is beautiful is meant to be lonely, or else it loses what is truly poignant in its soul" just makes me wonder...

I really like this piece. :nod: Thank you for sharing it with us. :hug:
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Devlin26 Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2012
I need to say you that I'm going to post this short story in some one I know facebook profile. I hope she can see what I see.
It will be a link, she will be coming here so I think it should be ok, right?
Thanks a lot beforehand.
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Big-The-ED Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2012
To be fair, this is pretty much how I feel about you right now; like you've already met me, maybe a thousand of me's.

I wish I had the power to show your writing to many others. This is the kind of stuff that should be read in school. My ONLY issue is that it became kind-of easy to lose track of who was talking; I wish there was some way to differentiate between speakers - and that's hardly your fault.

I am so glad there are still people who understand what a powerful well of creativity and beauty pain can be.
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LightOverpowers58 Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2011  Student Writer
Lol, it's sad but this is parallel to what my friends say to me so much.....especially the sarcastic part
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Sana-girl Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
This is so true that Its ridiculous. well, it's not ridiculous, it's incredible. This is an incredible piece and very noteworthy. Its something that everyone should have to read. All of your works are.
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haggard85 Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2011
Okay first off, this is incredible and so very worthy of being said. But secondly is that it is scary how close it come to a conversation I had with one that I love very much...maybe that says something...
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Love-Who Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2011   Artisan Crafter
Love this. It's very true. Sometimes the strangest ways are the best stories!
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much for those beautiful words. :hug:
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starshinexx Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Wow. You should write a book and get it published so I can die happy <3
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Awww!!! Thank you for even saying I could get published, thats a huge compliment! :D :D :D
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starshinexx Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
your welcome!! I definitely would buy :D
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M3rcaptan Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2011  Student Traditional Artist
great as always!
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks so much. :)
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M3rcaptan Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2011  Student Traditional Artist
welcomes!
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Forever-Tranquility Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Bravo. This piece reminds me so much of my relationship with my girlfriend, since she and I met online, and I knew that I thought she was beautiful long before I had ever seen a photo of her.
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you for the comment. :hug: Some of us realise what we have long before we lose it. :hug:
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loopylozzy92 Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2011  Student Photographer
o.O This..I have no words, I love your work!!
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much. :glomp:
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shehrozeameen Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
:jawdrop: this is exactly what happens to me very very often. AMAZING!! :claps:

dear ~UntamedUnwanted you are truly amazing in your ability to bring to life your works of fiction. Truly a pleasure reading this particular work.

Hats off :worship:
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Awww...Thank you shehroze. As always your words are so beautiful and well thought out...you give me far too much credit, I just write what I know. :)
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shehrozeameen Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
you know a lot then. and its to your credit that you delivered something wonderful.

Very well written :)
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xXxFallenDreamerxXx Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2011
Another beautiful piece of work.
It's true, people do meet in strange ways, but sometimes, it leads to something just as, if not more, beautiful.
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much for the kindness you always show me. It was much much needed today.:hug:
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xXxFallenDreamerxXx Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2011
I hope things are going well for you. :hug: If there's anything I can do, just let me know.
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WhipCreamCookie Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
The very last sentence got me, this is incredible but I feel lucky to have passed on this page.
My life has been a living hell and I didn't know the reason why, I mean got up this morning and I was like I want to go somewhere or just disappear, I hate the state I'm in I hate what's happening around me and I wanted company someone who says "I understand" and pats me on the back, no body I've ever spoken to comes around for a second chat and I always go back for the sake of it.
As I said before that very last sentence got me and I thank you, very much for showing me a key to myself
(cuz trust me I've been wondering if I'm human lately)
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you for this long, beautiful message. I'm so glad I could help you in any way. :)
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WhipCreamCookie Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Yeah!
And you better keep it up too cuz im coming back!
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LoveEqualsArt Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2011  Student General Artist
I love this. It's so nice~
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
:heart: Thank you.
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Krusnik03 Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Haha, that's the thing about inspiration. You can find it practically anywhere. XD I just found some right now, in that sentence. Great piece!
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! :hug:
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Krusnik03 Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
You're very welcome. ^^
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Dezi-chan Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2011
This is wonderful because words is how we really meet online. :) And this is why I love articulate people haha. Great piece!
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
It's true. People are online and you find yourself connecting to them a lot better. :) Thanks for the comment! :D
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Neko-Noodle Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2011
hilarious 10/10
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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ninquetari Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2011
You write beautifully.
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Awww...thank you! :)
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MoonliteMeadows Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
It's amazing. :clap: Bravo. You should really submit these to 100 themes, they blow everyone out of the water.
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Awww! Thanks so much for saying that! :hug: I will try and submit these. :)
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MoonliteMeadows Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
No prob :D, and I will look out for them in the group :D
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lonelyemogirl4evr Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2011
This guy sounds so hot and the girl sounds so cute
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