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he was winterish blue eyes and an autumn scarf dressed in an stupid pink summer sweater that made no sense on a spring day. His shoes were converse, the kind of the skinny intellectual who had just enough money to buy one pair of decent shoes. she never really liked skinny intellectuals, yet did find herself considering them sometimes, in the way she considered coffee that was tongue scalding (horribly and without excuse).

it is odd then, that she still doesn't regret his monsoon flavoured kiss, the kind that made your tongue bleed with its passion, its heat.

understand:

he drew in uneasy catches of breath as he snored in the heat of the summer night, nights when she would stay up and listen to cars that passed by, pretending they were a waterfall instead of the cold harsh truth of metal against concrete, just so she could sleep as soundly as him.

she took his breathing for granted.

deny:

he spent hours lost in the dry unending silence of his typewriter, of his word making, and yes, even of his long walks that become longer everyday. autumn, like his autumn scarf inspired him, he insisted, forgetting to eat, forgetting to sleep, forgetting to drink; forgetting her.

all for the secrets of cinnamon perfume and plum lipstick that he was always covered in when he returned from these long 'walks'.

no wonder he would never hold her until he washed his hands when he returned. they had been too busy holding the curves of a frame too delicate to be hers.

break:

he left his autumn scarf under the broken little bed when he left with a waif of a girl, her mouth covered in plum lipstick. she chose to forget it there, or else her lungs might collapse when she saw it...and she couldn't afford to forget to breathe.

even if breathing seemed like a luxury now.

fall:

she still hates the rain, the way it reminds her of how she will never be cinnamon flavoured or wear plum lipstick or waif like enough for him to kiss again.

her mouth is too soft and thin, her scent too seasonal, her bones too big.

she still hates the rain because there is something of a dark epiphany about watching your life fall to pieces like droplets in an open window and doing nothing at all to stop it.
she would have broken that winter into ten separate snowflakes of seasonal joy, if it meant him staying till the converse shoes fell off his feet.

i only wish there was a way to make him understand that love has nothing to do with what is new, what is different. love is meant to be comfortable, old, understanding.

why was it so easy for you to tire of me and choose her instead. she doesn't even understand why you like burnt toast and old movies in the middle of the night.
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:iconlaffinia:
laffinia Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2012
this is seriously my favorite of your works.
brilliant.
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jessica35 Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2012
Beautiful. This "love has nothing to do with what is new, what is different. love is meant to be comfortable, old, understanding" is so true. Love it!
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signalspells Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2012  Student Writer
That's it!you've earned another watcher!
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NelehGrimm Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2012  Student Writer
I really love your work . It is always so beautifully written and it carries this certain silence that you don't often find in written works. It is a peaceful, yet empty silence. It kind of sets me at peace but still makes me fret a little and think and turn my thoughts at the same time. I don't know if anyone really understands this but it is the best way I can explain. Its just like even though you always start off somewhere in between you manage to make your writting whole and wonderful. Your work just wants me to also keep on writing so I can improve myself and stuff. Thank you for sharing something like this with us.
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tiraluv Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2012
I like to call it old people love. The love that has a print almost like the groove in your favorite memory foam chair. I love the way that she loves him for the quirky things. Yet again, your work is beautiful.
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SamiKitty14 Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2012
kinda of sad, but still amazing job ^.^
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Big-The-ED Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2012
I have a friend going through something almost similar, and it's almost painful to watch her go through it, the way it makes a fissure in the whole way she sees the world and everyone she once knew in it.
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xXxFallenDreamerxXx Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2012
Wow. Just...wow.
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amakika7 Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2012
Wow I really like it
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Berry-Suppression Featured By Owner May 31, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I'm in complete awe of your writing. You are making such beauty from your pain. You're inspiring.
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LightOverpowers58 Featured By Owner May 29, 2012  Student Writer
Once again, a beautifully sad piece of writing. Gorgeous as usual but with an undertone of pain. The crest of emotions wax and wane with the tide..... The ocean euphemisms are becaue I want to drown that jerk of a boy who hurt you so bad..... Alas every pain has its reason and this one shall soon be unvieled...... Although retribution would be swift if you gave us his name.
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KaoticSilence Featured By Owner May 29, 2012
Dude. Your writing is absolutely, positively wonderful. I wish I could write as well as you, and all the other writers clicking away at their keyboards, typewriters- whatever they're using today. When I write, it's like "HA. HA. WORDS." When you write, the words flow into achingly beautiful streams of stories that make me stop and think. You're one of those writers.. I can't explain it. You're just one of those writers. And, believe me, it's a good thing.
-Sincerely, a brand-new fan.
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Poetic-Stitches Featured By Owner May 29, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist

I just have to say, if you ever published a book of your short pieces and poems, I would buy it so very fast ♥
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner May 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
That is the biggest compliment anyone could have ever given me. :hug: Thank you. :)
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iWalkBesideYou Featured By Owner May 29, 2012  Student General Artist
a very beautiful piece you wrote~
it really plucks a certain string inside of me...
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner May 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you...from the bottom of my heart thank you so very much. :)
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After--Forever Featured By Owner May 29, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Oddly beautiful :)
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner May 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:glomp: Thank you! :)
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iceblade56 Featured By Owner May 28, 2012
Love is the strangest thing there ever will be. Something that will comfort you, then turn right backk around and gut you, and yet at the end of the day, you will still chase it. But your writing is amazing!
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner May 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! And love is an odd, odd place to rest your heart and soul. It chews you up and spits you out. :)
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Mrs-Freestar-Bul Featured By Owner May 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I absolutely love how strange this is and how it makes me want to write in a different way. Beautiful write:clap:
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner May 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you for saying that. :hug: I love you for commenting, just so you know. :)
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Mrs-Freestar-Bul Featured By Owner May 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:bow::hug:
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Blissful-Day-Dreamer Featured By Owner May 27, 2012  Student Writer
People never appreciate what they have...

and because people, like the seasons, change. ever ending. never ending.
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner May 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I love what you have written here. You should write more, that made my heart shudder from the inside. :hug:
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Blissful-Day-Dreamer Featured By Owner May 29, 2012  Student Writer
:blush: aaw shucks.. Thanks lovely
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A friend had once sent this to me in a time of need, I take no credit for it, but this reminded me of it so here you go:
"Love is a temporary madness.
It erupts like an earthquake and then subsides. And when it subsides you have to make a decision. You have to work out whether your roots have become so entwined together that it is inconceivable that you should ever part. Because this is what love is. Love is not breathlessness, it is not excitement, it is not the promulgation of promises of eternal passion. That is just being "in love" which any of us can convince ourselves we are.
Love itself is what is left over when being in love has burned away, and this is both an art and a fortunate accident"

I always feel like etching this into a nice big rock and throwing it at my ex's face, but then I stop to think, and realize that I'm happy. Who would have thought that by leaving what once made me happy would make me happier.

Anyways, thank you for always writing what is written in my heart~
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner May 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Love is indeed temporary madness...and I have to say I am in full favour of stoning someone who has not valued your heart... But if you are content...that is the biggest stone to their face anyway. :)
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Lacriyme Featured By Owner May 27, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Very beautiful. But so, so sad.
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner May 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. I seem to thrive on sadness. :(
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the-neon-affairs Featured By Owner May 27, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
And yet you continue to impress me...you have a fine way with words and my heart is a sucker for them...Do you write for a living? Because you should be! c:
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner May 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I wish I was good enough to write for a living. :) Thank you for even saying that. :)
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the-neon-affairs Featured By Owner May 29, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
But, you are more than good enough! You're Welcome! c:
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peiyuu Featured By Owner May 26, 2012
This is beautifully written!
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner May 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. Your icon is stunning. :)
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Nikki-ism Featured By Owner May 26, 2012
Cinnamon is overrated, and plum's decay and rot so quickly...
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner May 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I agree. I wish he did too. :(
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Krusnik03 Featured By Owner May 26, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I like the way you don't use punctuation, it somehow makes this feel stronger. You have an amazing talent for making your words come to life with the people they're based on.
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner May 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you as always for your lovely comment on my work. I believe the punctuation would have taken away from the flow of the piece actually...I like it being like a whisper.
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Krusnik03 Featured By Owner May 29, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I agree, it sounds good that way. :)
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Adonael Featured By Owner May 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Beautifully picturesque.
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner May 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :)
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Adonael Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
No worries :)
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shehrozeameen Featured By Owner May 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
.... woah...
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner May 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:glomp:
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shehrozeameen Featured By Owner May 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:)
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cutemusica Featured By Owner May 26, 2012  Student Digital Artist
omfg this spam comment fits so well don't report it
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twilight-fan-4eva Featured By Owner May 26, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I cried reading thisthis is breath taking <3
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner May 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:glomp: Thank you. Please don't cry. I'm sorry this hurt you. :(
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