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My mother always told me I was born with four spines. They stay there, side by side, in my ramrod straight back, the reason for my very correct posture. So when my back began to arch, people noticed.

My parents were first. You look different, they would suppose as I would approach every morning for breakfast. Is something wrong? My mother would question. Are you ill? My father would ask.

I had a gift with the vague and I used it to my only advantage in this scenario. Because telling them the truth would be a lot more devastating. How would I tell them about the fact that my bones, my spine, the very part of me they admired most, was depreciating?

I suppose the trouble with most relationships is to trust someone, knowing that you would willingly lie to them, just to protect them from getting hurt. We all do it, and those of us who claim we don’t, only lie because their lies are smaller. I lied to protect them from what had happened to my bones. Not just my spine. All my bones.

The thing with bones are, they are on the inside of you and they grow in whatever direction they want. You do not have a say on it. Just like I didn’t have a say when I fell in love with you. You began to grow inside, quite like another, more twisted, less straight spine.

You were a sharp, painful object, made of something stronger than granite. All four of my spines were put to work dealing with you and they still weren’t enough. I took each one for granted, till there were none left. And when I had nothing left to break, you decided you needed something that wasn’t broken to start all over again.

Human bone is as strong as granite, my father had read out to me at the dining table. A block of bone the size of a matchbox can support nine tonnes-that is four times as much as concrete can support. He smiles as he tells me these facts, in a way that breaks my heart.

I can only imagine how difficult it was for you to crush the entire skeleton that was me.
K, thank you for being my four spined boy.

And fixing all my broken spines.


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:iconblubbityblub:
blubbityblub Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
amazing, amazing, amazing.
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DeviantArtist14 Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2014  Student General Artist
Chilling words, love the use of bones here, makes this so intriguing!
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deeplyDophin Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
dam, wasn't expecting that.Danisnotonfire: FEELS 
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xlntwtch Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2014   Writer
:iconcongratulationplz: ...on your DLD.
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Keep writing and keep creating.

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yutika-marker Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
so incredible!
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shehrozeameen Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
(deep breath) (nodding) (gulp)

(claps) (smiles)
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silversongwriter Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2013
The analogy of the human heart with the skeleton is executed perfectly here
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Moonlark91 Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2013  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
this gave me chills.. im breathless and stunned at this poems beauty... my poetry feels pale in comparison.. well done and bravo!
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Amazing. <3
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're a star, Ricky! Thank you! :D
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer

I think it is YOU that is the star, Nikita, but thank you. :heart:

And my absolute pleasure. :) I simply adore you and your works. :glomp:

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Blissful-Day-Dreamer Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2013  Student Writer
Holy shit... I honestly don't think I've seen a description like this for that "feeling", well done :hug:
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :D
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Steamland Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2013  Student General Artist
wonderful job, i;m sorry about your broken spine. Wish I can help you heal it. wonderful job as aways sweetheart. :hug: 
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confidenceAlive Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oh my, this is lovely. In a sad, horrible sort of way--if you know what I mean! Another beautiful piece (:
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much, dearest! :)
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mintybreeze Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
The four bones thing confused me in the beginning but I understood later in the story haha.
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much dearest! :D
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xlntwtch Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2013   Writer
The imagery is out-of-this-world fine, and what you do with it, expressing love and lost love, is tremendous. Thank you. :+fav:
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much, my dearest. You are amazing! :glomp:
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xlntwtch Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2013   Writer
You're welcome. :hug:
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Kakuzuxbountyhunter Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I'm confused.
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Lmomjian Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
^
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DistantRedemption Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2013

And... the sad part is... no matter how many people try to fix those bones, there is always one that remains cracked. Scared and wounded, hoping and praying for that one person to find it, and mend it. But the lies, they cover it. That is how many fall apart.

 

Truly moving and deep... excellent work.

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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
So so true. :(
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maryjayne530 Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
God, your writing gives me goosebumps. never stop writing, you have a true gift!
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!! :hug:
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RosemonkeyCT Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow, this is amazing. So... intimate, almost.
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you my dear. :glomp:
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DracoannaShadow Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2013
i don't quite understand, but i found it very moving,so well done.
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:lol: Thank you! :D
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The-Mysterious-J Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
agree :-)
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BOTDFgirl24 Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Omg! That was a really intersting story of yours. Keep up the good work!
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :D :D :D
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BOTDFgirl24 Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
ur welcome.
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TheMordechaj Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Very nice, i'm happy because i can learn english and read something interesting in the same time :D
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks so very much, my dear!
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Auzichick Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2013
Can someone please explain ? I have no idea what is going on. You can't have four spine it is biologically wrong and the human bone is not stronger than granite. And also bones grow in a already planned out blue print that is there when your egg is fertilized.
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
The four spines represent someone who everyone considers brave. The four spines is a different way of saying the word brave. The human bone IS as strong as granite and much stronger than concrete. This is a scientific fact. feeldriven.com/fitness/amazing…

The piece is about symbolism for how someone who the people know as strong can break because of someone she/he loves.
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KidPitIcarus Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Do you not understand what this is about?
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:iconauzichick:
Auzichick Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2013
I have no idea please explain?
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KidPitIcarus Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
It's symbolism.
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Kiko-D Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2013  Student General Artist
The four spines are used as symbolism ;) As for how strong bone is- I have no clue but I think the best way to enjoy this is by thinking more figuratively than literally :)

But again, who am I to say? I'm not the artist.
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:iconauzichick:
Auzichick Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2013
A symbolism of what ? 
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:iconkiko-d:
Kiko-D Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2013  Student General Artist
I could be multiple things, like personal strength or anything else the author means it to be. That's the beauty of interpreting it.
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SawCats Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
im not quite sure, but i think it's love.
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GIMME-SOME-ONIONS Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
So beautiful. Love it :D
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!! :hug:
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Lady-Buffy Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2013
very impressive!!
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