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The girl he loves is midnight, like the blue of the sea cradled by the moonlight.
The girl he loves is verdant, the very green of the hill kissed by the summer delight.
The girl he loves is coral, as pink as the roses that grow in his mother's garden.
The girl he loves is crimson, red like the autumn leaves that lay abandoned.

The girl he loves I can never be
Because he's allergic to violets,
And violets are too much like me.
I haven't written in ages. And all I have been able to come out with after struggling with a blank page the whole day, is THIS. 

:(

When I was thirteen a Wordsworth like boy who was loved nature and who I liked very much told me that he was not now, not ever going to date me because I was too different, too boyish compared to other girls.

If I met him today, I would tell him: "Actually I like being different. Oh...and from thirteen year old me, fuck you."

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shehrozeameen Featured By Owner May 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
the rhyme works well in this poem, while at the same time, the ending punchline was well handled. I think that idiot was naive in believing what he did, but hey, to be frank with you, you're a wonderful person to be with. His loss, and there's nothing that can be done, other than letting him realize that his ego will be his bane. Anyone's really.

Again, this poem... its nice. :) I mean it - the ending line does bring back the whole poem full circle, and it makes it clear that you aren't someone who should be bossed around. All in all, though - its  nice. Really good.
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ChillhYoh Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014
Amazing!
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Your creations are always so astounding. :heart:
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xJadeyxRAWRx Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Beautiful. I teared up a little bit!
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Rojozorra Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2013  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
This is gorgeous.
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singmyheartout4you Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2013  Student Writer
Thumbs Up 
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weirdandproudofit Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2013  Student Artist
I think I love it even more now I've read the description to it. Brilliant. :D
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Fallen-Angel-01 Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is brilliant.
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sarcastic-Assassin Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2013   Photographer

Don't be disappointed in anything you write, sometimes it takes small steps to get back into the swing of things.

 

Besides, I love everything about this one, why should anyone have to be someone else in order to be loved?

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viridiluna Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I love it
It's amazing!
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mintybreeze Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
So glad to see you writing again!
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thegirlfromindonesia Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2013
Interesting poem. it's really nice. (:
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mariaosen Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
So tear jerking. I like it^^
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Morpheus1035 Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
A lot like my situation with the girl I love.
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ViolettaVictoria Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2013  Student Photographer
This is really wonderful.
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catnio Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2013  Student General Artist
Fantastic poem, I really know that feel haha.
Good on you. ;)
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you, my dear. :)
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gillian-raine Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
This hit home. Thank you. 
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:hug:
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silversongwriter Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2013
Hey, that's actually a really good one. Everything is coherent and a central theme ties this together. I love that about poetry and I don't see it enough. And I've seen some pictures of you on your page... And the last thing that pops in my head is "boyish"
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much, my dearest. And for the compliment as well! :blush:
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RVFanatic1 Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2013
Good on ya. I would have probably done the same thing to him if he said that. Just to piss him off I'd probably just take you and give you a big hug and say "See? that's how much being different rocks! Being 'normal' is to mainstream.' ". There's nothing wrong with being different, as long as you aren't TOO different...as in Ted Bundy different ^^;
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I agree, different is good as long as you don't hurt someone because of it. :)
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RVFanatic1 Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2013
exactly :). There has to be a happy medium in everything you do.
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lostinthesun Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2013  Student Photographer
I love this! especially the last lines.
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!! :D
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djinn98 Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2013
I love this poem and your work. Great job!
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks so much, lovely! :)
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That1PersonYouForgot Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I love this. Great job!
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:hug:
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That1PersonYouForgot Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Llama Emoji 23 (Shyness) [V1] 
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HM-Dragon-Dreamer Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Ouch. Hit close to home.

Great poem.
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks so much, my dear, for taking the time to comment. :)
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HM-Dragon-Dreamer Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
you're most welcome :)
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CutieDeidara Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2013

I think there are times for everyone to feel like this, but be sure to stay just the way you are.

Always remember, that you are perfect in the eyes of a special someone out there in the world.

You just have to find each other, and even if it takes years, decades or a life time, when you meet that one person, who's able to turn your world upside down and to melt your heart like sweet chocolate, you will know that all the struggling and fighting for your love was totally worht it :)

So never give up - especially not yourself!

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SixstringMatt Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2013
I have missed your writing here :hug* I wish I still had the heart or the courage to write from my heart, like this. I miss it, :(
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CutieDeidara Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2013

Never give up what you truly love, Matt!

Everyone can be an artist, if he just believes in what he's doing.

Always be proud of yourself and of what you were able to accomplish in life - even if it's 'just' a little poem :)

I'm sure you can do it and be an amazing writer!

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ShyButterflyLove Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Wow. I can totally relate. It's frustrating to know you're the one for him, but he's blinded by popularity and stereotypes. I love being different, and everyone who's different should love it too. Some day I'll someone who'll love me for being myself. :) 
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confidenceAlive Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I was thinking it's about time you put up some more writing... :)
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
After this one, I started writing again. Been working on some stuff. :D
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confidenceAlive Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Excellent :)
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MK-heART Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2013  Student General Artist
i love this... it reminds me a lot of myself actually... so beautiful written!!
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks so much for taking the time to comment. :)
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DemonHowl Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2013  Student Writer
Nice
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:hug:
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NyokoJT Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Just wanted to say that I actually find your poem very beautiful. Neatly structured, nicely put turn of events, if I may say so. And it sounds very elegant and despite the melancholy it does not feel depressing - at least not to me. ^^
 (I lost a good night's sleep the last time I was working on a poem because there was always a word that just did not fit in the way I wanted it to.) Please, don't be too harsh when looking at your work.
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. So much! :)
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13th-ZodiaK Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2013  Student General Artist
YES. THIS IS PERFECT. *clutches desperately to chest whispering "my precious"*
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
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13th-ZodiaK Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2013  Student General Artist
:flirty:
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