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The girl he loves is midnight, like the blue of the sea cradled by the moonlight.
The girl he loves is verdant, the very green of the hill kissed by the summer delight.
The girl he loves is coral, as pink as the roses that grow in his mother's garden.
The girl he loves is crimson, red like the autumn leaves that lay abandoned.

The girl he loves I can never be
Because he's allergic to violets,
And violets are too much like me.
I haven't written in ages. And all I have been able to come out with after struggling with a blank page the whole day, is THIS. 

:(

When I was thirteen a Wordsworth like boy who was loved nature and who I liked very much told me that he was not now, not ever going to date me because I was too different, too boyish compared to other girls.

If I met him today, I would tell him: "Actually I like being different. Oh...and from thirteen year old me, fuck you."

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shehrozeameen Featured By Owner May 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
the rhyme works well in this poem, while at the same time, the ending punchline was well handled. I think that idiot was naive in believing what he did, but hey, to be frank with you, you're a wonderful person to be with. His loss, and there's nothing that can be done, other than letting him realize that his ego will be his bane. Anyone's really.

Again, this poem... its nice. :) I mean it - the ending line does bring back the whole poem full circle, and it makes it clear that you aren't someone who should be bossed around. All in all, though - its  nice. Really good.
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ChillhYoh Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014
Amazing!
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Your creations are always so astounding. :heart:
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xJadeyxRAWRx Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Beautiful. I teared up a little bit!
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Rojozorra Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2013  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
This is gorgeous.
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singmyheartout4you Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2013  Student Writer
Thumbs Up 
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weirdandproudofit Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2013  Student Artist
I think I love it even more now I've read the description to it. Brilliant. :D
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Fallen-Angel-01 Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is brilliant.
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sarcastic-Assassin Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2013   Photographer

Don't be disappointed in anything you write, sometimes it takes small steps to get back into the swing of things.

 

Besides, I love everything about this one, why should anyone have to be someone else in order to be loved?

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viridiluna Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I love it
It's amazing!
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