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Hell is staring at a phone willing it to ring
just because you believe someone will keep
his forgotten promises.

Hell is calling someone
hoping they would be glad to hear from you
only to hear them say they will call you later.

Hell is understanding that you're temporary
even though you have already fallen in love
with the person who cannot love anymore.

Hell is being faithful to someone
without ever knowing if he ever will
be as faithful to you.

Hell is wandering on an empty road
After a truly awful fight which
didn't end in reconciliation

Hell is not realizing that the truck was heading
straight for you when your eyes were closed
the strains of music deafening you to a roar.

Hell is waiting for your daughter to breathe
without a thousand machines having to help her
take a deep clean breath.

Hell is waiting for your child to wake up
so she can tell you she loves you
and that she is just fine.

Hell is holding your best friend's hand
as tightly as you can just so it doesn't
feel as cold as it does in yours.

Hell is wanting to play soccer with your sister
then realizing that she won't be around for a while
and praying that a while won't be forever.

Hell is watching the girl you just realized you love
struggling to breathe on a hospital bed
knowing that you were the one who put her there.
Life has a funny way of making you stop feeling sorry for yourself. I thought I was in hell, having to repeat a semester and things going so askew with my parents.

And then this happened to a dear friend. She just happened to have loved someone who didn't care for her as much as he should have.

What a horrible way for me to start counting my blessings.

I'm sorry my beautiful girl. I'm sorry you had to get hurt for me to realise how good I had it. I'm so glad you're fine now and no one will ever hurt you again.

Not even him. No matter how much he claims to love you.

(Even if he hasn't left your side for even a second. I still hate him.)

EDIT: Decided this should not be in the scraps.
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jojo22 Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Dracosphere Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Am I right in assuming that every time the font style changes, a different person is going through their own hell, and that they are all a part of the same disaster?

By the way,
That was...amazing. 
Crystal-Magic13 Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
second paragraph. :huggle:
TheJulesRules Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow, this is really great.  Deep. 
animatedastronaut Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is absolutely amazing. Your poems are little stories, but also large bits of life all wrapped up in truths and unraveling lies.
SlingshotTF Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2012
You words are just.... beautiful...
mInd-Lapse23 Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2011
I learned that people act before thinking on its effect. That's how words can become so meaningless... Also, people who maintain that sunny day perspective are only willing so that they may feel closure and strength of will, regardless if they get hurt (or even cause harm). They (and this is something I have a difficult time with) need to find the appropriate time, otherwise their intentions rest in shallow waters and thus are revealed easily (how unattractive).
shehrozeameen Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
... This is pretty dark...

Which makes me want to like it even more.

Its true. Hell is the shattering of our own selves - but in such perspectives I've never even understood.

The best friend part was actually thought provoking. That's well made.

Good thing this isn't in scraps. Its well written.

It should have been in a 100 Theme Challenge though. Its tough stuff.
NightKyoBlack Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Beautiful. Just beautiful...
AzeeraTheNinja Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2011  Student Interface Designer
Wow this is a beautiful piece, I absolutely love the idea, and the emotion was just flooding this piece, almost making me tear up.

Really, I absolutely love it, the italics at the end of each stanza is also a nice add, I love how you wrote this, I love the change of views, and I didn't see anything wrong with it.

Great beautiful piece :clap:
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